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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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crowd gathers at riverside park fish knife through water sea serpent-like raging mutants uncertain of genre spawning bottled magic rigorous major-league attention draws ideas from superstructures stepping inside the mind of imagination endearments skip from a childlike man sailing on a bridalway composition of chuncky waves over a marbel basin coupled with a biblical terra cotta sunrise travel book photos of roses on wine tasting spindals archwayed by pleasant floral like a drapped elegant garment thin veiled… yet, amazingly true to nature... ivory romance mystical array of intense & brilliant color almost certain pre-raphael paintings invisible, yet there for emotions to touch to feel such a strategic therapeutic center filled with galloping trails of early spring white blooms swaying gently in the wind.... Egyptian-styled half figurines grey squirrels seriously play around to the tunes from a huge circular pool and there a fountain lodges a slender nude Artemis daughter of Leto and Zeus fratility surrounds may flies hatching bold and hungry and there somewhere in time I stroll the pedistol of eminence of many leaves cultivating options of conversation sprawling water reveals nymphettes drapery, gently pulled back and freed from necessity bathing in all their naked beauty paraphernalia of virginity lay against my mind such like venice & it's countryside, cottages village people, children planting memory and you there next to me less is more and several lifetimes whisper "companion lovers" can't live with or without each other "dearheart" we are completion in unknown beginnings over and over again maybe someday we'll get it right? secrets live like numersous nodes of true interpretations that venture toward the moon a private venture we alone may tour until then ...I love you...~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lee~ You can truly write like no one else I know~ 'and you there next to me and less is more and several lifetimes whisper ' ... this being only a snippet of all I found to like in this penning~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
Your poetry is truly unbelievably breathtaking…each time I read you it is like being next to you feeling your breath as you speak…you have such a wonderful gift…I am amazed in you with every read…I know I don’t always comment but you paint with such color that you move me….helen |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I agree with all the above and MY favorite snippet is "...."dearheart" we are completion in unknown beginnings over and over again. . . and of course my favorite of all snippets is alwasys..."I love you"... jwesley |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
yes....as others have mentioned, the following contains lines that are especially fine: “and you there next to me less is more and several lifetimes whisper "companion lovers" can't live with or without each other..." I also like: “we are completion in unknown beginnings over and over...” And...specific images such as: “children planting memory” “mystical array of intense & brilliant color” very interesting ‘write’! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
and my favorite snippet is... "dearheart" we are completion in unknown beginnings over and over again maybe someday we'll get it right? I love the way you write! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
we are completion in unknown beginnings over and over again I know I'm not the first to be drawn to these lines... but they definitely deserve recognition... they're wonderful! *S* I like this very much, Lee... beautiful work! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Painted loving words on a canvas of truth. A beauty. JL  Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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