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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2007-04-26 05:47 PM


Thinning the Feel

I think back to the walking,
the hiking and talking
and the years that have grown on me.

What was the hold, the reaping of
that was so worthwhile that the origin
creeps inside the mind...

thinning the feel of the day
leaving empty spaces
in need of fill?

I listen for the love songs,
to hum the pain away,
to balance those voices one hears

that warn of the truth,
that there are no shadows in the wait,
no doors to be opened...

when one closes, that the grass
really is not greener and to give
is not always better than to receive.

To want what no longer exists
leaves me drained
as I watch the sands of time...

needing to be turned upside down again.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2007-04-26 06:20 PM


smiling here, even though I found this rather sad, I couldn't help but notice how you have grown, not just in our hearts, but as a lovely person and poet.

Beautifully rendered, mo.

nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2007-04-26 06:30 PM


and I appreciate your words more than you can know~~

hoping you are faring well
Thank you, K

M

Drauntz
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3 posted 2007-04-26 06:59 PM


life...dig out the love from yourself for a bird, a flower,a grass, a cup of clean water.
you will get the strength form nature.
and YOu will... friends here love you.



secondhanddreampoet
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4 posted 2007-04-27 11:46 PM


I especially liked:

"To want what no longer exists
leaves me drained
as I watch the sands of time...

needing to be turned upside down again."

[although, it all-too-easily could be  
  rather an effective 'summation' of my
    own existence!]

nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2007-04-28 07:07 AM


DRauntz, thank you but nature  just adds to the wearing  me out~~ especially at this time of the year.

Bruce, I guess there are many that may be living my words at times...Thank you,

M

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6 posted 2007-05-01 09:38 AM


To want what no longer exists
leaves me drained
as I watch the sands of time...

needing to be turned upside down again.

Living your words... exactly. *S* I often read your work and think we're living parallel lives. *S* And I ache with this, being too well acquainted with doors that close, leaving only unpenetrable walls. *S*

Beautiful work... this is going into my library! *S*

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2007-05-01 11:10 AM


"To want what no longer exists
leaves me drained
as I watch the sands of time...

needing to be turned upside down again."

~ I too, have had moments like that in my life.
Your poetry always touches me, dear poetess.

May the spring revitalize you and may your hourglass be full once again with la joie de vivre! (the joy of living)


Linda

LeeJ
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8 posted 2007-05-01 12:51 PM


a fabulously bittersweet write...
have known this
realize, the time well spent to individual spirituality....

and then comes summer on a breeze of passion

Hugs

The Lady
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9 posted 2007-05-02 12:58 PM




my pick is...

"thinning the feel of the day
leaving empty spaces
in need of fill?"

such gems in your work M

nakdthoughts
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10 posted 2007-05-02 05:31 PM


thank you for your kind responses..I appreciate the time you take to do so


M

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