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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2007-04-26 01:28 PM



I hate the way
that you can make
me  feel you

here,

from there
where you are

thousands of miles away
still touching my heart

causing this ache
making me

miss you

even more.

I've seen the paintings in the air
brushed by the hand of God~ Lonestar

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LeeJ
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1 posted 2007-04-26 01:31 PM


beautifully bittersweet...

sad, and lonely is the feeling from this...
its raining here to, but soon the sun will shine once more...

Hugs to you


Jenna
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2 posted 2007-04-26 02:18 PM


beautiful..could feel your pain in this
HopeS
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3 posted 2007-04-26 02:20 PM


I can relate to this so much


Hope

Meggen
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4 posted 2007-04-26 06:40 PM


nice.

Megg.

nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2007-04-26 06:42 PM


very sweet, Donna...


M

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2007-04-26 06:52 PM


Man I know this feeling...James
The Lady
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7 posted 2007-04-27 11:35 PM




I don't even have to tell you
how this one makes me feel gentle Donna

hardhitting...

secondhanddreampoet
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8 posted 2007-04-28 01:40 PM


To me, this 'write' is another most finely emotive example
of what I term "slice-of-everperson's life" dejavu.  In particular,
it makes me think of two grand 'lost loves' (a certain lass and
her native Scotland!)

Applause!

aziza
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9 posted 2007-04-28 05:12 PM


You touched me - and that's what it's all about.  Wanna hokey-pokey with me?  Kidding.  This is lovely and touching - and I feel it.

A

passing shadows
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10 posted 2007-04-29 09:07 AM


you would think that no one person could possess such power, but dang it if they aren't just overflowing with it!


jwesley
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11 posted 2007-04-29 05:10 PM


beautiful my friend.

j.

jwesley
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12 posted 2007-04-29 05:10 PM


beautiful my friend.

j.

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Gaia
13 posted 2007-04-30 07:03 AM


You've cut through all the superfluous words and nailed it with this, Donna.
Margherita
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14 posted 2007-04-30 10:03 AM


As long as there is room in your heart this presence will be felt. Sharp and true!
If it still hurts, open a little window in your heart and say “fly away, I give you back your freedom”. May it work! Still, sometimes this ache has a sweet touch left.
Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
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15 posted 2007-04-30 11:26 AM


May Spring dawn in your heart and like a slow-motion fountain, fan out and spray the hurt far away, and may it be replaced it with healing, peace and happiness.  Lovely poem from a lovely lady. Thank you.

- Owl

MoonShadow
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16 posted 2007-04-30 11:48 AM


Donna, you reflect the embodied spirit of many a 'star crossed lover'. Yet... for my soul... If it were but all that I could have, even still, I would have it so. Though the distant be great, I would cherish the feeling that binds and love all the more.

         Peace be unto you,

            MoonShadow.

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17 posted 2007-04-30 02:17 PM


Miles aren't an impediment to love... neither do they ease the pain of losing love.

Superb write!!! *S*

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Deep in the heart
18 posted 2007-04-30 02:52 PM


1derful write

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Gentle Spirit
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19 posted 2007-05-01 10:43 AM


Thank you each so much, it is appreciated.  Moonshadow...you and I both, yes agreed....   Thank you kind sir...

I've seen the paintings in the air
brushed by the hand of God~ Lonestar

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20 posted 2007-05-02 08:18 AM


hugssss....a beautiful write Donna...

~~**~~
Life is a balance
of holding on and letting go (KU)

Gentle Spirit
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21 posted 2007-05-02 08:26 AM


sis, it is so good to see your smile again.  Don't stay away so long next time, ya hear??? (((HUGSSSSSSSSSSSSS))
Earth Angel
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22 posted 2007-05-02 09:02 AM


Dear Donna, your spirit is indeed, gentle ~ and it feels so deeply ~ and you convey those feelings so poetically. You write what you feel ~ and I feel what you write.

Loveya!
Linda

Gentle Spirit
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23 posted 2007-05-02 09:10 AM


Linda I am so glad that you can understand what I write and am so appreciative of being able to express myself here through words...lest I go nuts not writing...   Thanks so much sweetie. HUGS

I've seen the paintings in the air
brushed by the hand of God~ Lonestar

iliana
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24 posted 2007-05-04 10:47 PM


Donna, you have a way of putting feelings into words so effortlessly.  *hugs*....jo
Gentle Spirit
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25 posted 2007-05-05 08:26 AM


Hugs Jo. It' so good to see you again. And hey, I just write what I feel. Sometimes I worry about the technical aspects of writing and other times I just write what pushes itself out.  This was one of those times.  Thanks sweetie, have missed you!!
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