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'Dark' Love
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'Dark' Love |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! 
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‘Darkest’ Love Just beyond a grand percussive song of storm, when the moon is but an apparition (ravaged by the waves of time) in a dark and pensive sky of midnight blue and tenuous starlight.... wounded galaxies are slipping past my window panes, the empty mirrors of my soul’s uncertainty, reflecting that ‘overwhelming question’.... of how I might yet seek escape from the ‘black hole’ of your heart, where love falls short and memory lives too long?! [This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (04-26-2007 01:02 PM).] |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
one of the best love poem. I felt the strggling of the feelings. I like to read love poems wothout the words of "love" "feel" or "heart". YOu do have a "heart" but it is the black hole tell it all. very much enjoyed. "Hawking radiation is a theoretical process by which black holes can evaporate into nothing"-----Black Hole in wikipedia. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Wow! This is AMAZING! The imagery, the feeling ... Once again, WOW!!! ~Terry ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
Skillfully guiding the mind's eye from the timeless to the specific, relationships between sky and earth, Selena and Gaia, are well expressed and eternal. |
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MindBodySoul Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 196NJ |
I can relate, understand the darkest love... A black hole.. the void.. "the empty mirrors of my soul’s uncertainty, reflecting that ‘overwhelming question’.... of how I might yet seek escape from the ‘black hole’ of your heart," How do you escape... the heart which is our black hole? Beautifully written!! Drauntz~ I agree- it is a love poem ... without the love words...  Jen--->MindBodySoul |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
Bruce, ya know, I've read a bit of your pennings while wandering through the pages in search of my prodigal muse ... and this, I love. You have a wonderful talent and I'm enjoying reading your offerings. ~*Sheli*~ |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
"how I might yet seek escape from the ‘black hole’ of your heart,"....clearly show the desprate of love(in or out) so to be honest, the last two lines are extras. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I, too, always forget all the wrong things...this was captivating and I need to read you more. So I will. |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
very nicely done |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beautifully original thought patterns. Enjoyed the flow and the fall into the black hole. Super! Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
My wishes for your escape to a happier relationship, but thank you for painting your pain so beautifully in swirls of blue night so that we can feel this with you. - Owl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
where love falls short and memory lives too long?! I loved the entire poem as I was reading it and KNOW I had something in mind to post as response... and then I lost those thoughts completely, realizing your last lines could be my epitaph. *S* Talk about derailing a train of thought! *G* Still... these lines pierce even premonition's fog with their beauty and clarity: wounded galaxies are slipping past my window panes, the empty mirrors of my soul’s uncertainty, Beautiful write!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
After reading the opening lines of this exquisite poem on 'Dark Love', I knew I was in for another fine poetic offering from your pen! "Just beyond a grand percussive song of storm, when the moon is but an apparition" You certainly know how to create an ambiance and set the tone for your uniquely descriptive poetry! Well done!  Linda |
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