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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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edge of town sprinted away a little thirsty from salt licks waiting in voice activated cinimas buffed light headliner right out of pride and prejuduce absorbed translating a ghostly echo the way of all flesh he was the tongue she sang in bright sounds delicious and dubbed in English life sized café surrealism crashing into her pillows amber romance waving like corn dressed up child-sized turning lawless powers on walking comrades cupped in deep hands on a bed of temperatures risin screaming "I love yous' miming willing needs which stood moments longer like far-away thunder consentual & hot with fire smelling tossed air spinning them around swallowing truth faith in magic from the core of their being dizzy goblets of always in the mood were footsteps in the hallway wine...good news was they're first secret… where a balcony surrounded fire place leaving them on the brink of madness wiping away tears from cheeks of muffled screams they outnumbered unfulfilled desires holding exotic flora to the breast of adoration punctuated feelings won affections of new pleasures in another realm of measured prose neath their arbor of roses on a soggy late April Eve picnic was this fictional convenience? or a natural law placed on honest men? strange horizons forgot how to play the wishing game through some university of time tragic... living and breathing throbbing physicality inviting them to step into the embrace of a sensuous here & now utopian ideal the kind of love accepting impurities but leaves you all the richer for it a hermit crab writes true mystery from the belly of a centipede legends from a well meant moon exploding with laughter as she steps back just to let the juices of memory flow again [This message has been edited by LeeJ (04-25-2007 10:05 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ Now that is some strong juice. I wouldn't drink too much of that. LOL |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
*sigh* this beautiful poem captures the sensual, easy feelings of love and how peaceful it was in yesterday...I love it...takes me back to slower, easier times...*Big Hugs* |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
LeeJ your words trip me up say read me again for the feel and flavor “he was the tongue she sang in bright sounds” “dizzy goblets of always in the mood” “legends from a well meant moon” magic |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
I agree - truly magical. A world I could easily get lost in myself ... ~Terry ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Wonderfully expressed Lee The juices flow with a magical sensual glow Hope |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
interesting 'write'! I particularly loved: “café surrealism”... AND: “the kind of love accepting impurities but leaves you all the richer for it” but there are also so many other grand-fine images here (large and small).... such as: “a little thirsty from salt licks” ; “buffed light” ; “translating a ghostly echo the way of all flesh” “miming willing needs which stood moments longer like far-away thunder “ APPLAUSE! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I read you and it's like downloading your stream of conscious into my own, and the visuals are so stunning I worry sometimes they will stick and pop in my own stuff! I can't say I know what this means, but it wrapped me up and took me for a ride. (Next time, drop me off in Oz, will ya? *looking around and wincing*)  tornado poet, you!  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Nice write Lee J. NICE! JL  Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lee, what an amazing writer you are!!! I have to quote our Serene One's comments ~ "I read you and it's like downloading your stream of conscious into my own, and the visuals are so stunning I worry sometimes they will stick and pop in my own stuff!" ~ Ain't that the truth!!! lol Have a glorious day of light!  Luvsya! Linda |
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