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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2007-04-22 05:37 PM



Within

It's been at least a five year cost
maybe more... can't remember
when all my world came tumbling down.
It was (I think) September.

At first I closed myself in tight.
Shut the doors to all.
Eventually the sun would shine,
as the outside world would call.

I traveled far in those five years,
a few setbacks but then
who has not as years have passed.
One starts the move again.

Today I feel the strain of it.
The toughness wears me out.
His words surprised me, hurt me more
now that his move's in doubt.

I can't go back, I can't retreat.
I've stood my ground so far.
I want what's best, a selfish me,
I'm struck with words bizarre.

I should have known since he's still here,
in loft of barn out back...
Never left except six months
in all that time of lack.

Sighing now through fighting thoughts,
my freedom's looking thin.
When finally I'm feeling good
he's trying to get "within".

M


"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2007-04-22 05:47 PM


Dear Maureen, sometimes it just happens like this! It's quite a dilemma, but if you listen to your heart, maybe your "freedom" could be reinterpreted.

Intense feelings beautifully expressed.

Love,
Margherita

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
2 posted 2007-04-22 07:31 PM


oh, felt your strggling.


beautiful.

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !
3 posted 2007-04-22 07:37 PM


'personal'; real; emotive; powerful; effective 'write'!

MUCH applause!!

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