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secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

0 posted 2007-04-21 11:12 PM

Abandoned Hearts

I’ve walked
the longest roads
of no return,
chasing a nomad wind
through scattered hills
of shattered dreams
and broken promises,
where hope once sang
to my soul....
in hungry verse.

Now, I am lost to memories
and indifferent hours
in time-meadows sleeping....
with desires grown old,
and dreams turned cold,
for I have lived beyond
all point and purpose,
where Love has abandoned
my heart!

sweetpoetess
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since 2005-02-27

Posts 428
Florida

1 posted 2007-04-22 12:02 PM

This is a heart felt poem. I know what it is like to get your heart thrown in a blender and turned on frapee. But I know some day the right one will come along. You just have to have patience. Awesome poem here!!!

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

2 posted 2007-04-22 12:02 PM

Your words are filled with deep sadness....I can understand such loneliness as this for I too at one time thought my dreams were all dead...then a poet friend taught me that the dreams of love are only dead if we let them....it is up to us to bring them back to life and let them fill our souls with the beauty of dreams once more...then love is easier to see and feel again, to give and receive...May your dreams be rekindled and life be filled with love and joy....*Big Hugs*

MindBodySoul
Member

since 2007-01-10

Posts 196
NJ

3 posted 2007-04-23 01:17 PM

Iam torn by the sadness in your words... sound very similar to my broken promises, and dreams gone cold.. But love shouldn't die because of those things...

The words we write, show how much love wants to survive the tests of time. We wirte because we've loved deeply! (aside from loving the art of expression) The passion reflected in our words... is because love still glows within..

Thank you for sharing!!

Jen--->MindBodySoul

artyjames
New Member

since 2007-04-23

Posts 3

4 posted 2007-04-23 01:53 PM

I enjoyed your poem a lot... it seemed to be from the heart and had a nice flow to it... keep writing that is how you will find your salvation

ArtSolstice
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since 2007-03-18

Posts 498

5 posted 2007-04-23 07:09 PM

You have captured the sting of loss. Beautifully rendered.

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

6 posted 2007-04-23 07:27 PM

oh!!! how sad. life has ups and downs.

Robert Jordan
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since 2007-02-07

Posts 392
Philadelphia Pa USA

7 posted 2007-04-23 10:07 PM

Secondhanddreampoet,

This is fairly well done. The only nit I have is with your ellipses. When you are not ending a sentence, it's proper to use only three dots.

Other than that small point, I like it.

Bobby

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