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secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
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0 posted 2007-04-21 08:18 PM



Timeless Love

Bewildered sunlight
teasing broken hearts awake
with sad, sleepy thoughts
slipping dream-enchanted gates;
remembering Timeless Love!


PLEASE check out my 'LOVE Tanka' challenge
at: /pip/Forum7/HTML/000726.html

"No one can lay a hand on our dreams!"
   --E. V. Lucas

[This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (04-23-2007 07:13 PM).]

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The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
1 posted 2007-04-21 08:22 PM




sigh...

"Bewildered sunlight
teasing broken hearts awake"

how could you poet?
it's so lovely...


Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
2 posted 2007-04-22 06:01 PM


A beautiful challenge and your tanka is precious, because LOVE IS!

I have never done a tanka and don't have much time right now ...

Love,
Margherita

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
3 posted 2007-04-22 07:27 PM


beautiful and enjoyed.
MindBodySoul
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since 2007-01-10
Posts 196
NJ
4 posted 2007-04-23 01:06 PM


Absolutely beautiful!!  

I felt every word!  

love is an amazing feeling.... that when held tenderly, could bring you the biggest joy!!

Thank you for sharing!!

Jen--->MindBodySoul

ArtSolstice
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since 2007-03-18
Posts 498

5 posted 2007-04-23 07:27 PM


Such a timely/timeless, budding & flowering write, so well in tune with the season! Beautiful!


rrrstop
Junior Member
since 2007-04-21
Posts 27
Florida
6 posted 2007-04-24 11:36 AM


Excellent write, thank you, and I plan to check out the challenge link. Neat trick to personify the environment ("bewildered", etc.) to get the world flowing one's way for a bit.

I will say that as to your sig, if vile enough poisons are used upon a victim then his or her dreams can be rather turned to nightmares, especially when nearing the waking state. I unfortunately know this firsthand.  

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada
7 posted 2007-04-24 08:28 PM


Yes...dreams are everlasting when woven with the eternal beauty of love...A beautiful tanka...I have never written one...maybe I'll give it a try...*Big Hugs
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