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Jenna
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since 2007-03-20
Posts 180


0 posted 2007-04-21 05:40 AM


So much hate in the world
from all around
such jealousy and hurt from the people that you called friends
so much tension in your heart
over which way to turn.
You've been shattered
you've been bruised
and now you're crushed.
Everything that you have ever known has disappeared
alone in the storm that has become your life,
where everything is dissolving in front of your eyes
moving so quick
that you can't reach out
and rescue what you once knew
to be true.

© Copyright 2007 Jenna - All Rights Reserved
paullallady
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since 2007-04-03
Posts 262
Michigan
1 posted 2007-04-21 06:40 AM


such a sad piece, and yet the feelings are so true.  The ending was amazing.
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
2 posted 2007-04-21 07:13 AM


sad for sure

good though

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
3 posted 2007-04-21 11:57 AM


always very passionate.

enjoyed.

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