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Culloden

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suthern
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0 posted 04-16-2007 02:15 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

As dusk slips across the windy moor
The sounds of battle shiver through my bones
Was that the cry of a night bird taking flight
Or the groan of a clansman falling,
Reaching for his comrades
Knowing none would reach home again?
Were his thoughts of the lass hed left
Or the pain of his breath leaving;
Did he taste his blood or just futility?
Does he know I walk this spongy ground
Shedding tears for him?
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1 posted 04-16-2007 02:21 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

"Did he taste his blood or just futility?
Does he know I walk this spongy ground
Shedding tears for him?"
Unanswerable questions, layered with pain.
Good to read you again, lady!
Drauntz
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2 posted 04-16-2007 02:21 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

wow. beautiful. very touching.

very soooo good.
Huan Yi
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3 posted 04-16-2007 02:50 PM       View Profile for Huan Yi   Email Huan Yi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Huan Yi

.

It was as stupid as a Japanese
Banzai into guns at point blank range.
Some never grow up or get the chance.
Let's at least hope they were,
(as often were in the Pacific), drunk at
the time.

John

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[This message has been edited by Huan Yi (04-16-2007 04:50 PM).]

Seymour Tabin
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suthern
Your reads always affect me.
Andrew Sewell
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5 posted 04-16-2007 04:40 PM       View Profile for Andrew Sewell   Email Andrew Sewell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Sewell

A great read, thanks for sharing.

Andrew

"Writing is not necessarily something to be ashamed of, but do it in private and wash your hands afterwards." - R.A. Heinlein.

Kethry
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6 posted 04-16-2007 05:04 PM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

It is so nice to see the poetry from the UK finally making it's way into the light. This has its voice but mingled with that are the memories we share of that proud, green land.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

Gunslinger
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7 posted 04-16-2007 07:43 PM       View Profile for Gunslinger   Email Gunslinger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gunslinger

Excellent treatment of one of my favorite themes. It made me go back and dig out my own effort from a few years back. Great write.
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8 posted 04-16-2007 07:46 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Suthern, a beautiful, well written poem.

Thank you.

The Lady
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"As dusk slips across the windy moor
The sounds of battle shiver through my bones"

such poignant work
with special meaning for me tonight

thank you
Earth Angel
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10 posted 04-17-2007 09:47 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

Belle, or should I say lassie! ~ Stand up and take a bow for this rousing write!

Superbly written!

You may not post often, but when you do, you do it with panache!


Linda
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11 posted 04-17-2007 12:18 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

SuthernGal~
I felt a kinship with the beauty of this penning~
It has such a feel of reverance ... you do the memories proud~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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LeeJ
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Did he taste his blood or just futility?
Does he know I walk this spongy ground


sometimes, painful and cruel as it may seem, there are no answers to questions....

so so nice to read you again...I've missed you
Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 04-17-2007 01:08 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

omg Suthern.....you do know how incredible this is don't you?  This reminds me of a long ago poet writing as he views this scene....

Kudos lady.  

May I just say again....WOW!!
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This is just outstanding, suthern!  (One of my favorites, for sure!   It's so good to grab a moment again and to see your name by this excellent poem.  

miscellanea
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15 posted 04-19-2007 01:47 PM       View Profile for luminosity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for luminosity

when tears fall...wow...your words are just so powerful, the emotions so real...
have missed you lady
iliana
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16 posted 04-19-2007 02:01 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Sounds like the prelude to a novel here....more, more!  *hugs*....jo
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17 posted 04-19-2007 06:23 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Agreeing with iliana here...one of your best.

When I used to visit old battlefields and forts, I would just go off into a trance of sorts, and at times I felt like I was warping through time.

This had that same effect.

secondhanddreampoet
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18 posted 04-19-2007 06:31 PM       View Profile for secondhanddreampoet   Email secondhanddreampoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for secondhanddreampoet

Excellent emotive 'write'....in addition to its 'universal'/timeless
commentary on the sad futility of all war; etc.....for me personally,
it evoked fine memories of my most recent visit (this past Sept.) to
Scotland (my first and foremost 'love'!)

MUCH applause!
OwlSA
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19 posted 04-20-2007 10:40 AM       View Profile for OwlSA   Email OwlSA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for OwlSA

Oh, yes he does!  Thank you for the moment.

In agreement, with Jo and Karen, most decidedly one of your best!

- Owl
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Midnitesun: It's good to be here... thank you so much! *S*

Drauntz: You've given my afternoon such a smile... thank you! *S*

Huan Yi: Long before the term came into use, men were cannon fodder... for God, for glory... for country, for cause. Thank you! *S*

Seymour: You are so dear... thank you very  much! *S*

Andrew: And thank you for reading! *S*

Kethry: I'll admit it... Scotland seeped its way right into my soul... and will probably flavor my poetry for years to come... if I can ever find the words to do it justice.  *S* But with all that love for the land... my best memories are those of loving friends... Thank you... for then, for now... for always. *S*

Gunslinger: Thank you so much - I loved your poem and am so glad you reposted it! *S*

Sunshine: Thank YOU, sweet lady... very much! *S*

Lady: I'm so glad it touched you... thank  you very much! *S*

EA: Thank you, my friend. *S* It's hard for me to be here much... but you always make me feel so welcome. *S* And yes... lassie it is. *S* Just before visiting Culloden, I'd walked through a churchyard where so many of the names were familiar... even if they'd lived long before the ones I knew who shared that name. Maybe that's why I felt so welcomed there... so at home. *S*

Marge: You don't know how much your words mean to me... I think fear of giving the  memories less than they deserve had kept my pen from pouring out words... thank you!!!

Lee: I've missed you, too, dear lady... And you're right... sometimes, there are no answers... just questions. *S*

GS: You truly humble me... that's what I was striving for... unsure whether I'd managed or not. *S* Thank you so much!!

miscellanea: It's good to be here, however short the time... and particularly special to read your kind words... Thank you! *S*

luminosity: I've missed me, too, my friend... Need I say more? *S* But I have missed you... and so glad you liked this... thank you!!

iliana: If you hadn't made me laugh, my head would be too swollen to get through the door. *G* Thank you so very much!!

serenity: I suspect we'd be great companions at battlefields... though we might need someone to drag us out of our trance and home. *S* Thank you so very much! *S*

secondhanddreampoet: I know you fell in love with Scotland, too... so I thank you most sincerely for liking this! *S*

Owl: Thank you so much, dear lady... I really appreciate your kindness! *S*

paullallady
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21 posted 04-21-2007 07:32 PM       View Profile for paullallady   Email paullallady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paullallady

this is so hauntingly beautiful and sad.
TinaTrivett
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Thank you for this. So touching.
Startime55
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23 posted 04-22-2007 01:01 AM       View Profile for Startime55   Email Startime55   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Startime55

BRAVO!!!!BRAVO!!!!...I could feel the dampness of the mist on the moors...A wonderful write that touches the inner soul of this Irish Lady....Well done...*Big Hugs*
sweetpoetess
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24 posted 04-22-2007 01:04 AM       View Profile for sweetpoetess   Email sweetpoetess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sweetpoetess

Such a mind blowing piece. It had so many sad parts. It reminds me of the movie "Braveheart". So beautiful this is. Awesome poem!!!

Poetry is beauty in words.
    

 
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