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suthern
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0 posted 2007-04-16 02:15 PM


As dusk slips across the windy moor
The sounds of battle shiver through my bones
Was that the cry of a night bird taking flight
Or the groan of a clansman falling,
Reaching for his comrades
Knowing none would reach home again?
Were his thoughts of the lass he’d left
Or the pain of his breath leaving;
Did he taste his blood or just futility?
Does he know I walk this spongy ground
Shedding tears for him?

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Midnitesun
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1 posted 2007-04-16 02:21 PM


"Did he taste his blood or just futility?
Does he know I walk this spongy ground
Shedding tears for him?"
Unanswerable questions, layered with pain.
Good to read you again, lady!

Drauntz
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2 posted 2007-04-16 02:21 PM


wow. beautiful. very touching.

very soooo good.

Huan Yi
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3 posted 2007-04-16 02:50 PM


.

It was as stupid as a Japanese
Banzai into guns at point blank range.
Some never grow up or get the chance.
Let's at least hope they were,
(as often were in the Pacific), drunk at
the time.

John

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[This message has been edited by Huan Yi (04-16-2007 04:50 PM).]

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2007-04-16 04:30 PM


suthern
Your reads always affect me.

Andrew Sewell
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5 posted 2007-04-16 04:40 PM


A great read, thanks for sharing.

Andrew

"Writing is not necessarily something to be ashamed of, but do it in private and wash your hands afterwards." - R.A. Heinlein.

Kethry
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6 posted 2007-04-16 05:04 PM


It is so nice to see the poetry from the UK finally making it's way into the light. This has its voice but mingled with that are the memories we share of that proud, green land.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

Gunslinger
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7 posted 2007-04-16 07:43 PM


Excellent treatment of one of my favorite themes. It made me go back and dig out my own effort from a few years back. Great write.
Sunshine
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8 posted 2007-04-16 07:46 PM


Suthern, a beautiful, well written poem.

Thank you.


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9 posted 2007-04-16 10:41 PM




"As dusk slips across the windy moor
The sounds of battle shiver through my bones"

such poignant work
with special meaning for me tonight

thank you

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10 posted 2007-04-17 09:47 AM


Belle, or should I say lassie! ~ Stand up and take a bow for this rousing write!

Superbly written!

You may not post often, but when you do, you do it with panache!


Linda

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11 posted 2007-04-17 12:18 PM


SuthernGal~
I felt a kinship with the beauty of this penning~
It has such a feel of reverance ... you do the memories proud~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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12 posted 2007-04-17 12:38 PM


Did he taste his blood or just futility?
Does he know I walk this spongy ground


sometimes, painful and cruel as it may seem, there are no answers to questions....

so so nice to read you again...I've missed you

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13 posted 2007-04-17 01:08 PM


omg Suthern.....you do know how incredible this is don't you?  This reminds me of a long ago poet writing as he views this scene....

Kudos lady.  

May I just say again....WOW!!

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14 posted 2007-04-17 09:17 PM


This is just outstanding, suthern!  (One of my favorites, for sure!   It's so good to grab a moment again and to see your name by this excellent poem.  

miscellanea

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15 posted 2007-04-19 01:47 PM


when tears fall...wow...your words are just so powerful, the emotions so real...
have missed you lady

iliana
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16 posted 2007-04-19 02:01 PM


Sounds like the prelude to a novel here....more, more!  *hugs*....jo
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17 posted 2007-04-19 06:23 PM


Agreeing with iliana here...one of your best.

When I used to visit old battlefields and forts, I would just go off into a trance of sorts, and at times I felt like I was warping through time.

This had that same effect.


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18 posted 2007-04-19 06:31 PM


Excellent emotive 'write'....in addition to its 'universal'/timeless
commentary on the sad futility of all war; etc.....for me personally,
it evoked fine memories of my most recent visit (this past Sept.) to
Scotland (my first and foremost 'love'!)

MUCH applause!

OwlSA
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19 posted 2007-04-20 10:40 AM


Oh, yes he does!  Thank you for the moment.

In agreement, with Jo and Karen, most decidedly one of your best!

- Owl

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20 posted 2007-04-20 04:58 PM


Midnitesun: It's good to be here... thank you so much! *S*

Drauntz: You've given my afternoon such a smile... thank you! *S*

Huan Yi: Long before the term came into use, men were cannon fodder... for God, for glory... for country, for cause. Thank you! *S*

Seymour: You are so dear... thank you very  much! *S*

Andrew: And thank you for reading! *S*

Kethry: I'll admit it... Scotland seeped its way right into my soul... and will probably flavor my poetry for years to come... if I can ever find the words to do it justice.  *S* But with all that love for the land... my best memories are those of loving friends... Thank you... for then, for now... for always. *S*

Gunslinger: Thank you so much - I loved your poem and am so glad you reposted it! *S*

Sunshine: Thank YOU, sweet lady... very much! *S*

Lady: I'm so glad it touched you... thank  you very much! *S*

EA: Thank you, my friend. *S* It's hard for me to be here much... but you always make me feel so welcome. *S* And yes... lassie it is. *S* Just before visiting Culloden, I'd walked through a churchyard where so many of the names were familiar... even if they'd lived long before the ones I knew who shared that name. Maybe that's why I felt so welcomed there... so at home. *S*

Marge: You don't know how much your words mean to me... I think fear of giving the  memories less than they deserve had kept my pen from pouring out words... thank you!!!

Lee: I've missed you, too, dear lady... And you're right... sometimes, there are no answers... just questions. *S*

GS: You truly humble me... that's what I was striving for... unsure whether I'd managed or not. *S* Thank you so much!!

miscellanea: It's good to be here, however short the time... and particularly special to read your kind words... Thank you! *S*

luminosity: I've missed me, too, my friend... Need I say more? *S* But I have missed you... and so glad you liked this... thank you!!

iliana: If you hadn't made me laugh, my head would be too swollen to get through the door. *G* Thank you so very much!!

serenity: I suspect we'd be great companions at battlefields... though we might need someone to drag us out of our trance and home. *S* Thank you so very much! *S*

secondhanddreampoet: I know you fell in love with Scotland, too... so I thank you most sincerely for liking this! *S*

Owl: Thank you so much, dear lady... I really appreciate your kindness! *S*


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21 posted 2007-04-21 07:32 PM


this is so hauntingly beautiful and sad.
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22 posted 2007-04-22 12:35 PM


Thank you for this. So touching.
Startime55
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23 posted 2007-04-22 01:01 AM


BRAVO!!!!BRAVO!!!!...I could feel the dampness of the mist on the moors...A wonderful write that touches the inner soul of this Irish Lady....Well done...*Big Hugs*
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24 posted 2007-04-22 01:04 AM


Such a mind blowing piece. It had so many sad parts. It reminds me of the movie "Braveheart". So beautiful this is. Awesome poem!!!

Poetry is beauty in words.
    

suthern
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25 posted 2007-04-26 11:47 AM


paullalady, Tina, Startime and sweetpoetess: Thank you... each one of you... so very much! I can't tell you how much your kind comments mean to me... but I'm so grateful. *S*
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26 posted 2007-04-26 04:56 PM


Oh my, Ruth ... this was truly a powerful piece. Your contrast between tasting blood or futility hit very hard.

Wonderful writing!

Best wishes,
/Kit

suthern
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27 posted 2007-07-03 09:46 AM


Kit: I am so remiss... but however tardy, my thank you is sincere. *S*
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28 posted 2007-07-03 12:58 PM



Bears a right back to the top ... it does !!

*HUGLETS*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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29 posted 2011-03-27 01:53 AM


This is how I would like to write.  
Splendid, dear suthern lady.

xoxoxo
A

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