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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2007-04-11 10:55 AM



Each day   more despondent
while sinking in to
oblivion,
somewhere out of pains reach
to that plain where fear no longer
grips the soul;

in control
of all emotion
needlessly weighing
on the mind
while taking a blind
leap of faith
creating a safe place
to reside
while being alone

so alone


with tears
left

unwept.

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JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
1 posted 2007-04-11 11:21 AM


Distressed and sadden as one reads this.
Heart-ripping, but so well said.

JL


Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2007-04-11 11:23 AM


JL, thanks so much m'friend. Hugs.
A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
3 posted 2007-04-11 11:24 AM


A very painful and sad write,
hugs to your heart!

~ARH

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
4 posted 2007-04-11 11:34 AM


Aww, come here Sweetie and let those tears fall.

Mind you, they would be mingling with the ones that are about to slide down my cheeks as well.

Your poetry always touches me.

May the sun dry up all those tears, m'friend. You have been through so much.


Linda

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
5 posted 2007-04-11 12:39 PM


quote:
while taking a blind
leap of faith
creating a safe place
to reside
while being alone



Dear Donna, out of your sadness you have written a wonderful poem. We can create that safe place indeed, with or without tears, but the major ingredient is LOVE. Let us never forget that we are LOVED.

Love and big warm hugs.
Margherita

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2007-04-11 03:52 PM


Yes - what Margherita said.  Life is but a test but cry those tears unwept to be completely blessed.
Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
7 posted 2007-04-11 04:41 PM


Sad.
"Unwept tears" is dangerous.

enjoyed your writing.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
8 posted 2007-04-12 02:31 PM


Such a sad ache to this piece Donna.
Sending heart hugs your way.

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart..
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
9 posted 2007-04-12 05:14 PM


sometimes it is okay to lose control~~


M

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
10 posted 2007-04-12 05:33 PM


I love the last three lines of this one.  Powerful.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

11 posted 2007-04-16 10:19 AM


Friends, you are all so very kind.  Thank you so much.  
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