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father and child |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
Daddy, Will you get the Sun for me? I want his warm light To make my room cozy and bright. “Sun belongs to the Sky” my dear Daddy Will you get the sky for me? I love rainbow and cloudy White I care for him when he cries. “Sky belongs to the stars” Daddy Will you get the stars for me? I want hang them up my ceiling Pretend they are twinkling eyes. “Stars belong to the night” Then Daddy Will you get the night for me? I’ll color him with many dyes Then fold him into a butter fly “Night belongs to the moon” Daddy, Will you get the moon for me? I’ll polish him to the best So he shall never lose his light. “Moon belongs to dream”. My darling. Then Daddy, Will you get dream for me? I’ll put all into my magic head To make all of them true in life. “Dream belongs to poet.” Then I want to be a poet. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
This is absolutely M A R V E L O U S ~ I am just going to have to save it in my 'favorites' list ... and I don't do that often~  Touchingly lovely ... gentle and wonderful~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I LOVE this 'write'! [one of the v. best I've seen anywhere!] MUCH applause! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
would make a nice children's book~~ M |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 BRAVO!!!!!This shall have a spot in my library shelf of Pips favorites! What a wonderful tale! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my this took my breath away! How gorgeous this is! A keeper for me to read to my granddaughter. Thank you so much! NancyFor it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very, very lovely indeed! It really makes a delightful evening read for children! Love, Margherita  |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Drauntz: What a very special and moving poem. I loved it! Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Drauntz A lovely read. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
thank you all. Sir Tabin, where is your daily poem for today? still on your merry-go-around? this poem is always in my mind when I do my chores. oh, chaos! [This message has been edited by Drauntz (04-09-2007 09:44 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh my....this touched me tender. Thank you for the charming child and the loving father and the poet. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
So sweet! Rae |
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Betty Senior Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 1159Virginia |
This is just beautiful |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
oh my,,,this is so beautiful. amazing. There are not enough words to tell you how this touched me. I love the ending, though all of it was beyond perfection. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
absolutely! yes! beautiful work! |
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BlueEyes Member
since 2002-08-30
Posts 152TX, USA |
Amazing write... I say that sincerely. This...this is what it is all about. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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