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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2007-04-07 03:34 PM


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One must pretend
I imagine
At these sort of things
To be enthralled

With its snacks and drinks
The occasional vatic quote
From some book that no one else
Except for us now would have read

Yet I think it true
Had I encountered any of you
With these very same poems
By my hand

When you were young
And then at least if not in fact
Thought yourself beauty’s preeminent
You still would have favored
Another man


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© Copyright 2007 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
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1 posted 2007-04-07 03:51 PM


A quiet melancholy, that even among those who should be your own you find yourself disconnected.  I've only been to one poetry meeting, and the sharp excitement of being among other people who loved words overspread the whole thing with a holy light to me. I'm pathetic, I guess.  But anyway, I wish you had been there.  I don't think I would have preferred another man.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Startime55
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2 posted 2007-04-07 03:51 PM


Oh My...this one really makes me think about something that might have been...Very interesting...*Big Hugs*
Drauntz
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3 posted 2007-04-07 04:11 PM


John, this is not your poem. You are a very kind person so you would not slap you readers right on the face and cut your female readers' heart like you cut your own pizza. Good sentences but bad poem.Bad!!!!
nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2007-04-07 04:30 PM


I'm with Nan...we had a wonderful meeting which I think left us with a greater respect of one another...and some warm feelings~~



M

Huan Yi
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5 posted 2007-04-07 04:33 PM


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Thank you all

And Drauntz,
immediately stop assuming
whatever I write affords some insight
as to who I am.  I am nobody and
glad for it.  As to this stuff, if the moment
struck I could write as Hitler.

I am though it's over
still a lone diver
which means nothing to no one.

Thanks again,

John

PS this not about any actual meeting
poetry or otherwise.  Apart from work
and forays for groceries I now hardly go outside.
However in my defence I have one fantastic
art and book filled apartment with a big window
on the world.

Somehow I knew this puppy
would bring newpapers rolled up
for its behind.

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Drauntz
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6 posted 2007-04-07 04:49 PM


I thought that you would have let my comment pass  because you write "you will what you will."

a very good poem truly but the tune is so low. too low.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
7 posted 2007-04-07 05:49 PM


first of all John, you aren't a nobody even if you feel that way...

and secondly PS this not about any actual meeting poetry or otherwise.  Apart from work
and forays for groceries I now hardly go outside. However in my defence I have one fantastic art and book filled apartment with a big window on the world.


I never thought you meant about a real meeting...I, just as Nan, wanted to state that we had  met and the 12 or so of us really enjoyed seeing where the words actually came from.

And I, too, know what it is like to not venture out as I stayed inside for a complete year before I went to that meeting...not working, nor shopping, nor paying bills or anything else that would be normal unless I was dragged out by friends.

My reasoning was phobic though, through embarassment and abandonment, which somehow I am managing to overcome (even if not in its entirety yet...still progressing~~)

I do not profess to understand you or your words...just respond when I can, if they touch me in some way.

Thank you for your words...

M


Drauntz
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8 posted 2007-04-08 12:38 PM


you said "You will what you will".

"As to this stuff, if the moment
Struck I could write as Hitler.".....
I will read what Hitler wrote if it was about something serious.
Hitler, like all other human being, wanted his enemy disappearing from the earth. But whom he killed was not some one hurt him before. They were law-obeying citizens. The same type of killing still happens today and through out entire human history. And nobody can justify a killing of innocence though.
If what Hitler did to you is to make you to be like him then I have to say that this is his best work.
Here, your poem slaps your reader friends, your friends(!!!!) Who love to read your poems, respect your talent and hope  to have your honest comment.

with repsect

passing shadows
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9 posted 2007-04-08 05:41 AM


what a crowd! I do love the write and agree with Maureen here
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