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Jenna
Member

since 2007-03-20

Posts 180

0 posted 2007-04-07 05:55 AM

I pull back, I've been burnt,
I've got too close to you,
now i'm paying the price.

You told me that you care,
that you need me in your life
but it sounded so superficial
and didnt ring true.

You told me what I wanted to hear,
yet I knew it wasnt the truth.

I couldnt bear to look at you,
needed to keep my strength,
couldnt be doing with love anymore
its had to turn to hate.

The hate spurred me on
making me forget that I ever cared.

The depths of my love I hoped would disappear,
into the silence of the night, reaching up into the stars,
only to be reflected back at me when least expected.

You see it comes so easy
just the sound of your name
stabs me in the heart,
somehow you destroy me
without even being there.

No words need to be spoken
yet you cut me like a knife.

You're out of my life
still the spirit of you is overpowering,
it breaks through any wall,
hitting me with force,
always finding a way to attack me.

You've disregarded me,
made me feel like a fool,
played around with my heart
and made me doubt myself.

Your words they burned me,
your actions destroyed me
but your eventual silence killed me.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2007-04-07 07:52 AM

You see it comes so easy
just the sound of your name
stabs me in the heart,
somehow you destroy me
without even being there.

yep, isn't that the truth!

Rottiestyl
Member

since 2007-04-19

Posts 60
Illinois, USA

2 posted 2007-04-20 07:49 AM

Okay...I don't write love poems well because I tend to put a twist of humor in it or a blade in it's back, Just a writers domain I guess. But this was so well constructed. It had love, loss, regret, pain, broken heart, what ifs, what nows and finally. . . the end.

This was very, VERY good. I applaud you because the flow in this was awesome. Nice writing!

Jenna
Member

since 2007-03-20

Posts 180

3 posted 2007-04-20 08:27 AM

Thankyou so much for your comments. I just wrote from the heart and this is what came out

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2007-04-21 09:10 PM

Nice writing...when the smoke settles, rebuild...what else can you do...James

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