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spring evening
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spring evening |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
Wind is blowing Petals are dropping I close the door Candle is lighted Wine is poured I Toss to empty seat. Phone is beeping Oven is smoking Door bell rings Red roses Bottle of Champagne Sorry for the wrong press Wind is blowing Petals are dropping I close the door |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Vivid description of emotions. Excellent write! Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Phone is beeping Oven is smoking Door bell rings" ~ Been there!  "Wind is blowing Petals are dropping I close the door" ~ Such a sad and lonely closing to a "spring evening". Giving you a warm hug, EA |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
again...this is what I call a "slice of 'everyperson' life (dejavu)" write.... V. good! Applause!! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Gee, I know I responed to this and several others this evening but I don't see them appearing at the top of the heap...wonder why... anyway, Loved this (again) with all the warm-fuzzies I felt reading it.... j. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this does have a bit of a lonely feel to it I hope you aren't feeling that way *sigh* |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
Thank you all. It is very strange for me to write some self-pity poems when I feel perfectly fine. It never happened to me before. tell me why? |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
What you're calling 'self-pity' is what I call being able to put into words what others feel but can't verbalize. You don't have to personally "feel" all the feelings another feels to be empathic; but you do have to be able to put it into words that others CAN feel. Which you did well here. You painted in words what another might have painted in oils. "Empathy (from the Greek åìðÜèåéá, "to make suffer") is commonly defined as one's ability to recognize, perceive and directly experientially feel the emotion of another." Jimmy |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
Thank you Jimmy. I'll think about what you said. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
I agree, lovely work! Thanks for sharing... Terry ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, |
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