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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2007-04-05 12:26 PM


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It never was
A happy house
To begin with

For all the noise
Those numerous cars
Parked along the fenced in yard
The windows always seemed
To mutely brood on what they knew

Trees still cast shadows
On the lawn
The street yet more
A lane inside a cave

And now no young girl
Comes running out the door anymore
Holding her coat closed against the cold
Dim moonlight in her hair

Or lips to lips in merged embrace
Holds the love that is her fragile heart
By the frame garage


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© Copyright 2007 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-04-05 01:19 PM


John~
I felt a tugging at my heartstrings at the memories this one brought to the surface~

Exquisitely poignant~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Drauntz
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2 posted 2007-04-05 01:21 PM


enjoyed.
I see what you see but might feel differently.

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2007-04-06 06:54 AM


I drive by old places in my old neighborhood and replay memories

funny how we do that


a lane inside a cave...I have a street here like that...it's beautiful, it is

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2007-04-06 09:56 PM


John, for some unknown reason
I feel your poetry is wasted on us
when it should be
in print.

You are a voice one hears
at readings
especially
in April.

When I read your poetry
I wonder
why

with all the meanings of
yes, well, and

of course


jwesley
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5 posted 2007-04-06 10:04 PM


I'm glad it's "in print" here - though I do agree in essence with Sunshine.  If it was anyplace but here, I may not have see it, nor would I have been moved by it as I am...
very well written/expressed, my friend.

j.


Drauntz
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6 posted 2007-04-06 10:31 PM


agree with above. Your poem made me pity myself deeply...heaven does not give me the gift. But I am very glad that I have the chance to read yours.
Ella Blue
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7 posted 2007-04-07 12:13 PM


There is a film called "Scent of Green Papaya", which is my favorite...almost completely done without speaking, using music...
Your poetry makes me feel the same way as this film; like holding my breath.

Huan Yi
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8 posted 2007-04-07 02:18 AM



Thank you all

And Sunshine you're wrong
The stuff I write is not in fashion
and frankly I don't care.  If a few here
find something in them that is enough
as both a surprise and a pleasure.

Thanks again

John

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