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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2007-04-04 10:34 PM


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Little breeds
From sour seeds
Growing discontent

From different fields
And assorted beds
Progressing
In disillusionment

A fallow gray attraction
Worn in older clothes
Vintage dissatisfaction
Yet only their pillows know

What wanting burning
That mutually yearning
A plane in torrid throes


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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
1 posted 2007-04-05 08:08 AM


for some reason, reading this gave me the feeling that everything will be okay for me

probably not your intention but thanks

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2007-04-05 09:19 AM


yeah, same here, I agree totally with Dixie
Well done
you have a way with words


Drauntz
Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
3 posted 2007-04-05 11:56 AM


you always have the ability to dig out the truth to reveal the soul.

must sighed out with an empty bottle.

a very good poem but I felt so sad.

only 85 is allowed to pen chaos and time

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