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Shallow Breaths |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Shallow Breaths Lightning blades a sky of purple tears Lifting high the light into sapphire spheres Swords at play, let astray By right, to the shield of hearts My mind sipping steam in the rumble Striking twice, core advice, moments tumble Azure flash, complimentary wine On the opulent side of adversely divine Split the sheath, spilling ardent the arrow By the sigh, uttered velvet night narrow Wellspring tapped, courage sapped April rain and away, clouded dream speak Tempered fantasy glass, lit in tendrils of brass Lilting songs of the sand, hedge an indigo pass Storms, but the power majestic make change As the spirits on harp, all to width rearrange Shallow breaths do I draw Shallow breaths Copyright Kkh 4/3/07 |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
ThisDiamond this is a very alluring and captivating poem. I enjoyed it immensely Hugs Kimberly |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautiful, entertaining and wide eyed loved this |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Tempered fantasy glass, lit in tendrils of brass" A superb poetical description, describing the lightning-split April sky! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I must agree with the ladies....Gosh, but you are so gifted. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
wonderful imagery..... as is so typical of this fine ‘wordsmith’! I especially loved: “ Lightning blades a sky of purple tears Lifting high the light into sapphire spheres Swords at play, let astray By right, to the shield of hearts” and: “Striking twice, core advice, moments tumble” and, most OBVIOUSLY grand!: ‘Tempered fantasy glass, lit in tendrils of brass” THAT...is about as 'good as it gets'!... much applause!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I do so love it when you rhyme! ahhhhh! |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
wonderfully woven wordplay, sewn together with a smooth rhyme. reading your beautiful works, always brings out the innocence of my soul........ |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
absolutely breathtaking. beautiful and the rythem and flow were amazing. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oh Yeah! A beauty!! JL  Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: The above lines alone are enough to get the feel of true poetry that touches the soul and the heart. Great work! Love, Margherita |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I know there must be a word or phase explaining the usage (I know I saw it somewhere)of doubling up important lines in a piece like you did in this last two lines of this beautiful write. I try to emphasize my own writing at times that way to make something really come into meaning (often fail at the attempt!), but loved the way it worked for you... jimmy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
We are sometimes allowed such a shallowed breath to be split asunder in crystalline mirror... shimmering... Kathleen....  |
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