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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2007-03-27 11:20 PM




I feel your ache tonight,
though I don't want to feel it,
those places deep
inside the fibers of existence
where the faces and the memories
rub raw the veneer
you pat in place and polish every morning;

this is a night,
one of those nights
when to touch you is to touch me,
those special nights strong enough
to burst through my sedation,
when no doubts
distort my feelings,
my senses reel
full in
my understanding of your thoughts
as they torment you
keep you from much needed sleep
and drag you from the edge
of the oblivion we each
in our own ways
crave;

I don't mind,
though it makes me sad
to hold your pain,
the undeniable
the reality eating at your life,
to feel the echo of the hollow
that grows inside your soul,
and I grieve each day
the bitter truth;

I let you slip away
willful and headstrong,
letting free the bold of you
to hold no regrets of you
knowing at times will come
this bill to pay.


©2007 by icebox

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[This message has been edited by icebox (03-28-2007 08:07 AM).]

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iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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1 posted 2007-03-27 11:52 PM


You do heartache like no one else, Mr. C......jo
passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2007-03-28 07:28 AM


very passionate and compassionate write...much enjoyed


Martie
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3 posted 2007-03-28 01:08 PM


Hello c.

The honesty in you breaks my heart many times.  

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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4 posted 2007-03-28 02:20 PM


Truly a most touching write, icebox.  "When the music stops" ... yes, and it always does at Heartbreak Inn.
Jenna
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since 2007-03-20
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5 posted 2007-03-28 02:48 PM


Purely amazing
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
6 posted 2007-03-28 06:21 PM


icebox
There are many ways of touching, this is one of them. Enjoyed

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
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Waukegan
7 posted 2007-03-28 07:16 PM




Icebox

This is good, though, if I understand
the ending correctly, hard.  It's
a burden being just someone else
in another's life knowing you'll never
measure up.

Again good

John

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