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passing shadows
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0 posted 2007-03-27 01:14 AM



I have a jigsaw puzzle
that I'll never finish,
and I drink coke and rum...
and I don't want to hurt you;
do you think I should come?

I've never been one to follow through
and I've said many times "I love you"
and never finished it.

Here it is midnight
and I'm in quite a fix,
I should be in bed
since I get up at six
but I'm wondering if I should call,
damn, you inspire me!
All you say is "you never know"
but I know you desire me.

And I know I want you,
need you...need, yes need.
Yet, I never finish...
started by greed.

I never follow through, see.
But I need you for me.
And I want to take that chance,
Oh yes, I want to dance.

But I don't want to hurt you...
don't want to say I love you and leave,
not finishing the feeling; but
say that you can still believe.

I need you.



© Copyright 2007 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
jessie
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since 2007-03-27
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1 posted 2007-03-27 03:15 AM


i like this one..
very much

TerryW
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Louisville, Mississippi, USA
2 posted 2007-03-27 04:20 PM


Very nice.  Very heartfelt.

Thanks so much for sharing this...


~~Terry

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2007-03-27 04:25 PM


I love this one Dixie gal...
Great ending.

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart..
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul.

Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
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4 posted 2007-03-27 05:30 PM


Wow you know how I am feeling to a tee....and I am still wishing I had stayed for the dance....AHHHH....take care

~~~kingsangel~~~

jak
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Charlotte, NC
5 posted 2007-03-27 06:12 PM


splendid rhythm.

Jak
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Eloise
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Wyoming
6 posted 2007-03-27 07:20 PM


Very good read.  The feeling of need is very powerful.  
JamesMichael
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7 posted 2007-03-27 11:26 PM


Nice...reminded me of an old Bob Dylan song that I liked, and perhaps still do...the song was "I Want You"...James
iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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8 posted 2007-03-27 11:54 PM


Nice one.....yeah, it would make a good song, too.   ...jo
marcel
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az, usa
9 posted 2007-03-29 03:33 PM


beautiful to look into your honest heart.
icequeen
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FL USA
10 posted 2007-03-29 04:15 PM


YES!! I too thought this would make a great song - see there Dixie girl, you are not minus your muse - she's there, branching you into songwriting

Great write -love it.

Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

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