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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2007-03-25 04:21 AM


Not really a bother if stars collide
as long as the bits don’t fall
and break the back of a woman’s mind
still strong in the wanting of all.

Danger lurks in that place unseen;  
the limitless mind can ignite a fire
or dependant on the state of affairs
pour water onto desire
for it stretches and crosses the gap
between the real and unreal
like a fisherman’s line cast every time
into the depths of the restless sea.

But no line or mind is immune to time
that slams the door on background feel  
and sends to the front a lover unloved
for the sake of conformity.

Conformity – comfortable, safe, secure
and time still ravages all
so not really a bother if stars collide
and simply one day choose to fall!

Helen / 25 March 2007


© Copyright 2007 Helen - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2007-03-25 08:58 AM


a good one Helen.

M

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
2 posted 2007-03-25 09:06 AM


Hi, Honey!

I especially enjoyed the following lines:

~ ..."like a fisherman’s line cast every time
into the depths of the restless sea."

~ "But no line or mind is immune to time"

~ "Conformity – comfortable, safe, secure
and time still ravages all"

If any bits of stars were to fall upon your illustrious head, may they bestow good wishes upon you!

Loving hug,
Lindaq


Honeybunch
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3 posted 2007-03-25 10:15 AM


Maureen and Linda - Thank you, ladies!  The stars have collided but I'm still alive under a heap of stardust battling to rise to full majesty like an angel into the sky!  
steavenr
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4 posted 2007-03-25 04:16 PM


such a dramatic write, and I truly mean that in a very good way...love words that take you into themselves and these did...excellent craftsmanship...great poetry
sandgrain
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5 posted 2007-03-25 04:39 PM


What a joy to read and contemplate!

    Rae

Honeybunch
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6 posted 2007-03-25 05:35 PM


Thank you Steaven for such a supportive comment.  I really do appreciate it.

Rae - Thank you so much.  Sometimes it's a bit pointless to contemplate what's going to happen regardless.  

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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7 posted 2007-03-25 05:36 PM


"so not really a bother if stars collide
and simply one day choose to fall!"

Yep, that's what love does to us....so well said, Helen.  Gather up that star dust, my friend, and weave it into a beautiful vestment.   ...jo

Honeybunch
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8 posted 2007-03-25 05:53 PM


Hi, Jo.  Hmm?  Watch the press - I'm writing love o-u-t, out.  It seems there's no time or place for it and yet it's still a wonderful world - aren't we all so lucky!
Helen

dwgpoet
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9 posted 2007-03-26 01:14 AM



Stars falling/conformity;

Thanks for Sharing, Honeybunch.

dwgpoet

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