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jak
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Charlotte, NC

0 posted 2007-03-21 08:48 PM


An unending work in progress since 2002 after me a two friends hit pine trees repeatedly spinning at about 80mph.

I remember feeling lucky
After spinning into fear
Spinning towards the unknown.

Images of floating Mississippi highway
Emblazoned on my spine, my mind
I will always remember that rain
Falling like liquid fire
Filling the road with heat
Melting our tires

Melting our moods, our high

I remember feeling lucky
After control and comfort
Were lost like old friends
Sending us into what seemed like
Such a slow dead spin
My friends fear as strong as mine…
Surging,
Bracing for pain and death,
An unknown urging,
Quickly loosing breathe.

We were on such a New Orleans high
That same damned day.
Ready to conquer the world with our minds,
State line by state line,
Hattiesburg, Mississippi claimed a piece of me that day.

I remember feeling lucky
After seeing still pine trees,
Ready to form a grave.

It was suppose to be one of those rides
Floating between sleep and surprise
Deep discussions abounding
The world’s problems sounding.

On a steady gas station diet,
Talking about the times we had just had,

Instead the road steered us where she wished
Willing us to her whim
Introducing us to her power
Dangling us from a limb.
Dancing with us on the highway
Tired of letting us lead
Dodging raindrops, and treetops
Our free will had been freed

Helping ourselves
To a hell
Of a view
For a few
Seconds, the ride wasn't that bad either,
If we hadn't seen its end.

My mind was shuffled like a deck of cards
Everything fighting for priority
Rearranging into a reassigned order of importance.
Ill never look at a wall of rain the same way again.

It was more than an impact that day.
It rest with me still.

Three friends twisted in time,
Slamming into fates hand,
Three friends scarred by a wreck,
Our ride over --- a rough end.

I remember feeling lucky
When shock entered my system,
Sitting on wet asphalt,
Not sure if I was ok.

I felt just as the car,
That my mind's contents had been strown 50 yards in every direction
Covered in broken glass
Resting on the side of highway I-59
Waiting for rescue workers to come pick them up
And put them where they go.

I remember feeling lucky
After spinning into fear.

Jak
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1 posted 2007-03-21 09:05 PM


Wow..this piece delivers quite an impact jak!
I felt as though I were in that car too..
spinning wildly out of control.
An exceptional write.
Nancy

jak
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since 2007-03-14
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Charlotte, NC
2 posted 2007-03-22 01:05 AM


thank you nancy. ; )
passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2007-03-22 07:28 AM


scary feeling

reminds me of my own accident

powerful writing here

A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart
4 posted 2007-03-22 08:38 AM


    

Enjoyed!

~ARH

jennirey
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5 posted 2007-03-22 03:45 PM


What a tale. Thanks for sharing
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