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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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prelogy sunset yellows all suburban roofs but misses half the town; it’s dark already, down where the canyons have windows in them. no one looks up anyway; there’s husbandry in heaven after all. city yellow comes later, when it’s dark here. we shine it down where our true interest lies; our yellow never reaches to the roofs. darkness seeps down from them, until it spoils the scene. call it eulogy; we poets always write our own, but never, never on the stone. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
 Christian Glitter by www.christianglitter.com[/url] |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
true poem. I shall sit somewhere at 7pm today and read this. beautiful. failed in trying to find a photo or painting matching with your poem. the changing scene is in my mind so clear and dramatic. wow........... |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
sunset, one of my favorite subjects  you 've done it well, love the rhyme at the end, it works .... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Be sure you pick up Huan Yi's Eulogy...it's inspired by that one, and by his other poem, 4017 Massachusetts. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Very Good Ed We help each other . . . John |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...it's great how one poet can inspire another. If I said, I dig this poem, would you think me out of date? Some words just hit the cord of "wow"...this is one of them.  |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
I love to read poems that are inspired by other poets...this one is beautiful and has caused me to look to the others and read them as well....Thank you for being so inspired...**Big Hugs** |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
no one looks up anyway how true is that! outstanding piece! and I too am inspired by John |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I particularly liked the ending!: "call it eulogy; we poets always write our own, but never, never on the stone." |
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Aurelian Member
since 2007-03-20
Posts 109TX, USA |
Wow. A real picture. One of those crisp bites that surely exist in more than ink. A note: line 5 is a wee bit weak, a bit predictable. |
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1eyeopen Junior Member
since 2007-03-24
Posts 28NY, USA |
This is very good the imagery I constructed with-in tells me how beautiful you write. If we learn to live life as wisdom, we find enlightenment. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
discerning picture in yellow sunset words think I read it backwards going now to look for Huan Yi's Eulogy |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I think this is one of my favorites from you Ed-- eulogies are tricky things in themselves a prelogy can get ya committed!  Excellent work with this. I wish I knew how to write more academically pleasing. *sigh* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
city yellow comes later, when it’s dark here. we shine it down where our true interest lies; our yellow never reaches to the roofs. darkness seeps down from them, until it spoils the scene. A poet's life should be easier... and filled with encouragement. But then... we'd probably miss out on some of the best words ever written. *S* This is fantastic... every time I read it, I love it more... Your yellow reaches, my friend... beyond the roofs, across the world. *S* Thank you for being a poet! *S* |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
"never, never on the stone"... I love that How wonderful this piece is, and between yours and John's "Eulogy", I am rolling around in envy of y'alls talent!!  Excellent work. Just, wow!!! Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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