Shades of Heather and Green

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Open Poetry #40

Shades of Heather and Green

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2007-03-20 12:18 PM

Shades of Heather and Green

Today I’m looking at a scene
And counting forty shades of green
Surrounded by this purple heather
Peeking out the mist of weather

An envelope of interlope
Climbing up the mountain slope
An Irish vision to be seen
This country with its forty green

And clouds are drifting in and out
Lacing thoughts of warm devout
Smoothing glories in-between
This vision of a country scene

And on the pane the dew drops lain
Start to run in colors vain
Sleuthing out the gold of lease
A moment’s touch of worldly peace

A sign unto my path and goal
A moment’s comfort to my soul

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

1 posted 2007-03-20 02:38 PM

sounds like something I could feast my eyes on for a long long time!

lovely write Sy

Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

2 posted 2007-03-20 06:38 PM

I LOVE this!!! I used to collect little cottages and paintings of scenes like this but I can never get anything like this out in words!! This is truely beautiful!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

3 posted 2007-03-20 06:59 PM

one of your dream? or did you dream into it?
it is beautiful. very much enjoyed.

Aurelian
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since 2007-03-20

Posts 109
TX, USA

4 posted 2007-03-20 08:18 PM

I really liked it. Some nitpicks: I might change the last line of the second stanza, the "forty green" part sounds a bit forced. And the "unto" in the second to last line breaks the rhythm a bit in a slightly awkward way. But really - I like the poem.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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Louisiana

5 posted 2007-03-29 12:59 PM

How beautiful! *S* I needed this scene in my mind... thank you! *S*

TerryW
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since 2000-03-23

Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA

6 posted 2007-03-29 01:02 PM

Beautiful!

Wish I was there to see it too!

Terry

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

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