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Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

0 posted 2007-04-10 07:41 PM


A true story of today

When I was waiting for a friend
I met a woman of grandma kind
She nicely said hello
And started talking her grind.

My son was twenty one
He stays home for granted
He does no cooking and never cleans
So he shall move out and off with his dirty scenes.


My daughter goes to church
And left her daughter behind
The pastor was an x-prisoner
What could be in his mind?


I pray for them every day
While work like a mate of hotel
They check out using their babies
And their non-stopping yell

“Mother,
The day when we go to heaven,
You will go to hell
For you don't go to church
to get out of the spell.”

"Why you have your children spoiled?"
Never know.

[This message has been edited by Drauntz (04-12-2007 10:47 AM).]

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2007-04-10 08:00 PM


Ah, this is so sad. A Mother's prayers are always heard in Heaven, whether she says them in the church or in the kitchen!
I think many Mothers can relate to what you refer of the boy ... "he never cleans ...".
Yes, without realizing, we spoil our children, doing too much for them, while they could do their own part.

Thank you, dear Drauntz, for this powerful, realistic tale, which renders very well a probably diffused situation.

Love,
Margherita

outlawthunder
Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 67

2 posted 2007-04-10 08:48 PM


fiercely realistic with a sense
of truth you can't duck from or
call something it isn't.

writing like this comes from a
place that doesn't just know how
to make it all up, it's from experience.

you write with value and strength of purpose supporting every word and phrase.

OUTLAWTHUNDER

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