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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2007-03-17 09:10 PM


       Forest Song

   (Manmade Temples
  only hide the stars)

Boundless 'cathedral'
beyond all space and time
with no rumblings
  of impotent 'gods,'
the forest sings
in staggering cold-bright
  silence
of snow and winter lightning
illuminating the dark
  and windless spaces
of a frozen heart
where life once burned
in every moment of your love.

  

© Copyright 2007 Bruce E. Adams Jr. - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2007-03-17 09:22 PM


Wonderful write.  
jak
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2 posted 2007-03-17 10:18 PM


a relentless read.

Jak
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Janette
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3 posted 2007-03-18 11:11 AM


in staggering cold-bright  <---cold-bright, I like this use!
  silence
of snow and winter lightning
illuminating the dark

A chilling saga of love lost and very "illumanating."

Good read.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2007-03-18 11:22 AM


nice to read you again Bruce...hope all is well.
love the ending...where life once burned
in every moment of your love.

I am not sure about you, but I can't wait for springtime and then the warmth of lightning won't bother me at all

M

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Gaia
5 posted 2007-03-18 12:53 PM



A solitary pine staggers
'neath stolid stalactites;
backlit by lightning,
it etches the forest,
resonating crisp notes
of nature's crescendo
into a timeless reverie.

Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2007-03-18 01:05 PM


Bruce~

'the forest sings
in staggering cold-bright
  silence'


So vividly descriptive ... that one could hear it~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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7 posted 2007-03-18 04:11 PM


I love the majesty of this line

"Boundless 'cathedral'
beyond all space and time
with no rumblings
  of impotent 'gods,"

very nicely done

ArtSolstice
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8 posted 2007-03-18 05:01 PM


This is your best poem yet.
Vivid, strong, and painterly.


secondhanddreampoet
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9 posted 2007-03-18 06:46 PM


A profound thank you to all the fine poets who commented
on my 'Forest Song' write!
I deeply appreciate it, and will likely
respond to each of you individually as I can.
Life's "slings and arrows" have gotten the
better of me of late; but, if I can 'turn things around' (such that
I am not so fundamentally demoralized by the general 'way of things'),
I hope to return to "P.I.P." on a reasonably regular basis.

A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart
10 posted 2007-03-22 06:52 PM



A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart
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The Lady
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12 posted 2007-03-22 08:45 PM




"the forest sings
in staggering cold-bright
  silence"

exquisite poet...
I hear it sing
in silence

unholyjudgement
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13 posted 2007-03-23 09:12 AM


Indeed the forest sings the loudest

My mind is like lightning
One brilliant flash and its gone

Earth Angel
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14 posted 2007-03-23 10:41 AM


Spectacular piece of writing ~ as per usual! 'Twould surely be a blessing if you were to grace these blue pages more often!

You are a very talented poet, Sir Bruce!

Lovin' hug 'n a curtsie!
Linda

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