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Drauntz
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0 posted 2007-03-17 12:11 PM



Spring

Like soft hands caress my forehead,
And Gently lifts my hairs to spread.  
Holding my face and kisses around,
they brush my eyes and tears come down.

Not quite right

Like showering under the lover’s eyesight,
Cleans with his bright warm light.
Wrapped in  his fragrant whisper.
And stretches in the starry night.

Not quite right

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2007-03-17 06:28 AM


Welcome to Passions!

You will like it here. Nice poem and I will be reading more of you I hope.

Janette
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2 posted 2007-03-17 08:27 AM


"Like showering under the lover’s eyesight," <---great line here

Welcome to Passions.  I am sure you will see lots of great reads here you will enjoy and I look forward to more offerings of your work.  

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

Enchantress
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3 posted 2007-03-17 09:41 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Very very nice entrance piece!
I look forward to reading more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me. ~

Sunshine
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4 posted 2007-03-17 10:20 AM


Welcome to Passions!  Please,
check your email for a Very
Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

Drauntz
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5 posted 2007-03-17 10:47 AM


Thank you all. I do need encouragement. Do please feel free to make comments and suggestions my writings.
SmartChick
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6 posted 2007-03-17 11:18 AM


Welcome to Passions! Very nice poem.
miscellanea
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7 posted 2007-03-17 05:20 PM


Love your first post!  It's nice to have you here.   Enjoy...

miscellanea

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