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The Gentility Of Shallow Lives
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The Gentility Of Shallow Lives |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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I can not seem to serve up truth, ever, when you ask about my life, perhaps because I know never have you listened to answers, have no ear to hear a clear struck note, can not connect one conversation with the next except through recall of the text of your own comments; I am dying, like the earth sadly or maybe not, it is going slowly for the both of us. Why would you care? How could you dare to reach beyond your tiny world, when everything you need is served on silver plates, waits are nowhere in the world you have constructed from deep pocket credit cards signed in your lover's name; you have forgotten, paying rent by sharing sweat with your body is not the same as having earned your life on your own. I am holding in my hand an artifact, a stone, a flaked flint tool, edges more than razor sharp, old, so old, imagine a thing older than me, I know where I found it years ago and can even guess its source, perhaps be insightful about its intended use, but I can not be sure, it has no real place in this world having survived beyond the closing of its time; in my mind you are like this tool, though you lack its innocence, the edges of your mind gone worn and dull, you have ended up in a collection a cabinet of toys and odd antiques a curiosity kept dusted on display, a trophy to be admired by all the proper Hampton freaks. So, I have made a deal with me to cover when you ask, if in fact you ever ask again, I'll simply say the things you want to hear, all is fine, there is no fear, and never never ever will I shed another tear into the void I see expanding in the center of your soul. ©2007 by icebox . |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Mr. C., I imagined that flint-like stone was an arrow head though it doesn't really matter what it might be. Your comparison of the person with this tool was, I thought, quite interesting and unique. It's sad that some people do seem to hollow out...I've seen it in some of those who I loved the best so I do understand and now we are worlds apart. I worry a little about hunting for them and not being able to find them when the time comes. I guess it is about letting go, huh.  ....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sounds like you have it down pat I can say I understand this |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
intense dilema that one can only resort to what is best for them...self indulgence can so effect the lives of others.... smoothly integrated into a story that is heartbreaking and sad...  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
as i read this my heart is in my throat |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Is the easy way out always the easiest way? I doubt it.You have this person pegged.But I wonder...Hmm? martyjo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
There are days when I feel like I shoulda held out for the Hamptons...as if they'd have me. *laughing* Oh Charly--there are just some people, no matter how much they protest, don't share the same planet. And I guess in many ways, my life is the Hamptons to somebody else. Somebody in Africa maybe. But, yeah. (Don't mind me, I'm on drugs. Not a LOT of drugs though--doctors are stingy little expletives, ain't they?)  love you sweetie, and yeah, just tell 'em what they wanna hear, and um, that rock? Y'can keep that one to yourself for a while. I'm beginning to believe my doc performed my surgery with one of those.  *wince* |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
This is good . . . Glad you could get away with it . . . In it's way it makes me think of David Ignatow's Brooding, only more direct in its address. Would like to include it in my Word file collection of poems by others with your permission. If yes what name should I attach to it? Again good, John |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"having survived beyond the closing of its time; " WOW! The scope of this piece staggers my mind, yet I see it in people I care for in my life, too. Excellent write. always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox Powerful, and sad. *hug* |
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