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Allysa
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0 posted 2007-03-15 05:57 PM


My mother, she was angry when
beneath the black and white lined hem
those shoes, the ones I wore for years-
well, I was sure you couldn't see them

I'd tied the laces perfectly,
black to match my dress, you see,
and oh, I scrubbed the mud off too
the toes, they shined quite perfectly

My date, he thought it was devine
his shoes were black and white, like mine
and while others toes were pinched and
squished, all night, ours were fine

The girls in heels smiled and
I felt like I'd outsmarted them,
the shoes I'd worn to school each day
revealed as I lifted the hem

And that night, when it began to rain
as they stumbled, hanging back in vain
I ran across the grass, and laughed
thankful once again.


Mine are on the left, and I wrote this off the top of my head, recalling the time I wore them to the prom.

© Copyright 2007 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-03-15 06:22 PM


Style bucks trend as fashion when you've got the gift of confidence.

And oh, you do have that, and much much more!

I'm finding myself wishing I'd taken a picture of every pair of shoes I have ever worn out.

Enchantress
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2 posted 2007-03-15 07:08 PM


Ahhh...this is just great!!
And what an adorable photo!
Thank you so much for joining in the fun!

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me. ~

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3 posted 2007-03-15 07:20 PM


Alyssa~

LOVE THOSE SHOES !!!

I've still got my collection of PF Flyers ~~~

Have worn them a time or two to lah de doo dah events ~~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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icequeen
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4 posted 2007-03-15 08:00 PM


I love your story! I used to be a slave to those high heels m'self, but left them under the table at prom in order to dance lol... walking in them was ok then but dancing in 5 inch heels? Nah - its like asking for a broken ankle. (besides - they made me taller than my date and he wasn't crazy about that heheheheh)

I love the photo too - used to have a pair of those and finally tossed them when both soles had holes all the way through.

Cool challenge response

Caroline

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- Persian Proverb

The Lady
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5 posted 2007-03-15 09:59 PM




terrific Alyssa

love those sneakers
and the poem is a real treat!

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6 posted 2007-03-16 01:15 AM


I fell in love with this poem.

A

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7 posted 2007-03-16 01:20 AM


Cute....

~~~kingsangel~~~

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8 posted 2007-03-16 02:53 AM


Sounds like you had a great prom!  Very cute poem, Alyssa! ....jo
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9 posted 2007-03-16 07:14 AM


barefootin it is the only way to fly...LOL
this was great!  Enjoyed the giggle and the picture...outstanding story.  thank you!

Allysa
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10 posted 2007-03-16 11:00 AM


Thanks everybody. This was fun!

A little more background: Bought the shoes at a thrift store for $2, wore them nearly every day for three years, until they were held together with super glue and safety pins. I wore them to the prom, figuring no one could see my shoes unless I lifted my dress. And anyway, my date was 5'6", and I'm 5'7", so it worked out pretty well.

Janette
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11 posted 2007-03-17 09:12 AM


Oh!  You fashion Diva you!

Great write here.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

SmartChick
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12 posted 2007-03-17 11:30 AM


LOL! I enjoyed this very much.
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13 posted 2007-03-17 05:36 PM


Way to go, Allysa.  Those shoes do just fine!  Love the thought, words and photo.
Great to read your words again!  

miscellanea

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14 posted 2007-03-17 05:42 PM


Allysa,  I so loved your prom story and photo. My son had a crushed heel and so always wore high top keds. For his wedding day he went out and bought teal colored  high tops for himself and  his best man and ushers. They wore a teal cumberbund too.  The brides mother and I both happened to buy a darker shade of teal dress and it all looked planned.
    To top it off I had made my gold wedding band into an earring with both my wedding date and his engraved, because I thought of it as a gift from his deceased Dad and I.   His gracious bride  at the time to exchange rings reached up and placed it in his ear. I did not know she would do this. I just assumed he would wear it that day and after. I think others at the wedding were taken aback when they saw this, especially her mom.  But I loved it.  So I love what you did too.  It takes a confident person to go so far from convention. It is nothing wrong or bad but so few have that courage. Thank you for being a whole  Allysa.  martyjo

[This message has been edited by latearrival (03-17-2007 11:59 PM).]

jak
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15 posted 2007-03-17 10:52 PM


too cute. a great story telling rhythm.

Jak
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