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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa

0 posted 2007-03-13 10:45 AM


The day holds no promise yet still it is day.
Life is unpleasant yet still it is life.
Love has no touch yet still it is love
and “yet still” positions the whole damn lot
right on the edge of okay.

The edge is a line drawn to the side
off centre and angled away from desire
and bold, so bold, it makes a good place
to attract and hold the whole human race.

On the brink of this line everyone’s fine
in rush and scurry to ensure there’s no time
to glitter the surface with bits of a heart
and spread and sprinkle onto the blank part.

And a day in a life without love is fine;
this too shall pass with the blink of an eye
yet still it’s a bother because then comes another
and another, another, another.

The line circles, you see, like a net of disease
and traps inside the essence of feel
but, “Hi, how are you?
“Okay thanks and you?”
“Fine, just fine, I’m always fine” ~
and the parcel is passed until I walk away
from the game of life everyone plays!

Helen / 13 March 2007


© Copyright 2007 Helen - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
1 posted 2007-03-13 01:12 PM


this hit just right

love it!

Martie
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2 posted 2007-03-13 02:31 PM


Hi Helen...when I read this I remembered a poem that I wrote back in 2003.  I hope you don't mind me posting it here as after I read it I couldn't think of anything else to say, just hugging you.

She is going on the long road to wherever
the toxic air is thick with her regret
layers of meaning passing through her notice
chill on morning covers from last night’s draft

Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper
so far to go to find that midnight pool
only a line that moves with desperation
and the sound of quiet water far below

Let it pass she tells inside of eager
his lips are dew on sandy beach of time
your waiting for the water like a river in a drought
and release is on the other side of out


Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
3 posted 2007-03-13 02:41 PM


Thank you, Dixie!

Martie - you've now got me in tears!  Everything you write is so beautiful and so "spot on"!  Thank you for both the poem and the hug!

dingusjr
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since 2003-09-24
Posts 415
Missouri
4 posted 2007-03-13 04:59 PM


"Spot on" one of my favorite British expresions....as is your poem....spot on!
iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
5 posted 2007-03-13 10:18 PM


We are in the same place from the sounds of your thoughts here.  I think it is empty nest syndrome with me along with the flu.  'Course there's that other matter you know about, as well.     Helen, you hit the nail on the head here and really get the feelings across.  Hang in there, my friend....we never know when a pleasant surprise will come our way.   ....jo
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