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Tomer
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0 posted 2007-03-11 10:58 PM



Suns fall,
Moons Rise,
She chased them away,
Skying above all.

A never-ending chase,
Where Jazz tuned her skin,
While her eyes lit the oceans face,
With her aqua stare.

A beauty,
No,
A girl of nature,
Nature that cleans the streets,
And sweeps the forsaken.

A nature that curtails its wings to her shoulders,
As she breathes roses,
While singing autumn under her breath.

I live for her moves,
Moving through her steps,
As her rich brown hair,
Shares beauty with her soft, innocent face.

As I walk to her,
Desires are strong,
Where bullets exchange,
Through the heat of night,
She leaves me wanting more.

I can’t wait to see her rise again tomorrow.

© Copyright 2007 Tomer Fried - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-03-13 07:29 AM


nicely written
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2 posted 2007-03-13 09:12 AM


Tomer~

This is lovely~

'she breathes roses,
While singing autumn under her breath.'


A thought to *sigh* for~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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steavenr
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3 posted 2007-03-13 10:48 PM


this is crafted so well with turns of words in elegant, yet different ways...Love it!!
Nexis_Rose
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4 posted 2007-03-14 12:17 PM


I absolutely love the words you used. Makes me think of the changing of seasons and even Mother Nature herself. Makes me think how beautiful our world is and that we should restore it rather than destroy it.

"Our physical bodies are merely temporary hosts for our everlasting souls."

LeeJ
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5 posted 2007-03-14 12:52 PM


enjoyed the diversity of this
well done and with elegance

Janette
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6 posted 2007-03-14 02:41 PM


"As she breathes roses,
While singing autumn under her breath."

The visuals you so cleverly paint in this piece are fabulous.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

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