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passing shadows
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0 posted 2007-03-11 07:55 AM



Intermission


Half-written pieces of poetry,
my intermittent muse,
nothing seems to touch my life,
not even things I had to lose,
not things I cannot change
because I did not choose,
not things that make me laugh
in spite of leaving quite a bruise.

It makes me question myself
if I only have half a heart,
not being able to finish
these rhymings that I start,
despite the deep sadness
of you and I torn apart,
the pain all by itself
used to be a work of art.

My ending lines once packed a punch
and sealed it with a kiss-
but here I sit in intermission
without an ending line to this.


© Copyright 2007 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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1 posted 2007-03-11 01:45 PM


Ah Dixie gal...
I think you're ending line is write/right on.
And soon you will write a happy ending.
Love ya, Nancy

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me. ~

latearrival
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2 posted 2007-03-11 01:51 PM


Well you could not prove you can not write by this one. You still have it. and remember You Are Loved....
aziza
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3 posted 2007-03-11 03:04 PM


I look for your poetry.  You speak with so much depth for passion and emotion.  I would buy your book in a heart beat.

A

Honeybunch
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4 posted 2007-03-11 03:45 PM


"the pain all by itself
used to be a work of art."

So true, Dixie, and after intermission there will be more works of art which I look forward to.

JL
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5 posted 2007-03-11 04:02 PM


"It makes me question myself
if I only have half a heart,
not being able to finish
these rhymings that I start,"



I don’t believe it’s true
The words are there
Your charming sentiment too…
With that smile I see
In your picture above
Reflects nothing but happiness and
Gobs and gobs of words of love…
So,
Refuse the bad, the ugly and sad!
Cause when you write your poems and words
They sing a song and make everyone glad!!


JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

The Lady
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6 posted 2007-03-11 05:53 PM




"the pain all by itself
used to be a work of art."

so much said
in these two lines Dixie


nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
7 posted 2007-03-11 06:38 PM


better days are ahead...even here the sun is shining and the temperature is spring-like...


M

MGROVES
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8 posted 2007-03-11 06:42 PM


love ya dixi kind of sucky day here, another birthday, this 0ne makes me an offical senior citizen

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

passing shadows
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9 posted 2007-03-12 07:32 AM


thanks to each of you you make me smile

JL, thanks for that sweet little poem...a keeper!

Marcia, I'm hoping you had a great birthday!  I wasn't on here much yesterday so it just passed me by.   

ThisDiamond
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10 posted 2007-03-13 09:00 AM


Your vision is proof perfect, that the journey is worth taking.
Allow the intermission, as if it was autumn...when spring arrives, you will be that much more ready to bloom, sweet flower of the blue.

HopeS
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11 posted 2007-03-13 12:07 PM


Dixie , those words did come straight from your heart , you are still a work of art and  one in which I treasure

Hope

rwood
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12 posted 2007-03-13 07:36 PM


you'll never be finished, thankfully.

sometimes the closing words don't come because you're still open to the world.

the journey of a poem.

love,
reg

iliana
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13 posted 2007-03-13 10:13 PM


Dixie, you are still writing great poetry despite what you've said.  Keep it comin'!   ...jo
icebox
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in the shadows
14 posted 2007-03-14 02:34 AM




"...but here I sit in intermission
without an ending..."


I have needed a time-out for years.  I think it is a good thing...but that is just me.



Janette
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15 posted 2007-03-14 01:16 PM


My eyes say your intermittent muse is working just fine...keep on writing!

And I agree with the other commentaries, these lines pack a powerful message:
"the pain all by itself
used to be a work of art."

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

LeeJ
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16 posted 2007-03-14 01:30 PM


one can only be what they're minds believe they are, and you missy are one heck of a writter...so take the break, collect new relics of inspiration...remove the doubt, your muse is just taking a breather....

your writes are indeed a blessing to all of us.  

icequeen
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17 posted 2007-03-15 01:29 AM


"It makes me question myself
if I only have half a heart,
not being able to finish
these rhymings that I start"


You read my mind so often, you know. I've got bits of notebook paper with scribblings all over the place in here... little is finished and what is, I don't like. I keep wondering where my heart went. I always wrote best when angry, but now it doesn't seem to matter, as if I'm too tired to express the anger or anything else that I'm feeling. I have trouble remembering words now, and it drives me nuts. I look back at my older work and think I wrote that? Where have my words gone?

You though, manage to take your intermission and turn it into a really good half-time show It looks as if you've got your game on to me! I love your poetry, all of it.

{{{Hugs}}}
Caroline

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