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howardtsu
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0 posted 2007-03-07 12:48 PM


         nothing is sweeter

than standing next to her heater

      if i could complete her

maybe she'd show me the money

why can't i go meet her and sign a contract worth millions

  we could split up the honey

but i'm supposed to delete her

at least that's the opinion of billions

what if watching episodes of Monk with someone i don't love is neater

            than writing?



                                                              love,

                                                              howard




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passing shadows
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1 posted 2007-03-10 11:10 AM


Howard, sometimes your writing is cute the way you rhyme but I can't get this one

I think you have more potential

howardtsu
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since 2006-01-29
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2 posted 2007-03-10 04:57 PM


i think i could work on her rhythm a little bit

i borrowed a few lines from Jerry Maguire to improve the wit

and i couldn't resist calling on Monk's help to get her to sit

with me     


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