navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #40 » cinder
Open Poetry #40
Post A Reply Post New Topic cinder Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
ecrivan
Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923
my own state

0 posted 2007-03-07 10:30 AM


Cinder from a block
glass slipper on a foot
if a sister could be
so happy
as to meet a prince
ones that rides
white stallions
fairytale tell me more
about how the wicked
work with such strength
and live to outdo good
but endings are better
when shoes fit
foot size is so vital
just to think
all it takes
is a dance delivery
on converted pumpkins
eager to deliver
costumed load
to get an enamored look
cinders spark
glow in the dark
as wood burns
ashes fall
swept by eons of wind
until another glass step
catches a heel on a grading
the greedy
will sweep the ashes
of lost acquisitions
the simpler will prevail.


[This message has been edited by ecrivan (03-08-2007 08:41 PM).]

© Copyright 2007 Martin Dansky - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
1 posted 2007-03-07 11:34 AM


the greedy
will sweep the ashes
of lost acquisitions
the simpler will prevail.


love this one Martin...for many reasons

M

Sphinxen
Junior Member
since 2007-03-03
Posts 38
U.S.
2 posted 2007-03-07 01:14 PM


That was a very interesting piece. I particularly liked,

"to get an enamoured look
cinders spark
glow in the dark
as wood burns
ashes fall"

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
3 posted 2007-03-07 06:39 PM


indeed

well done Martin

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
4 posted 2007-03-07 07:21 PM


From fairied tales
to reality bites...

you did good, m'friend.


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #40 » cinder

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary