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RavenSmith
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0 posted 2007-03-02 06:46 PM



My arduous journey forgoes
to quiet nights,
as I’ve been invited
to float blissfully
watching the moon
show his face in lucid water.
There, I’ve wailed
a sorrows tale
looking for natures handouts to
resign the waltz
that I had betrothed, and
yet how can I
recant the atlas that brought me here.
For wasn’t the dance
the compass that sketched my invitation?
The quiet does not muzzle inspiration
nor does it comfort a compromise.
The night air is crisp
and as the breeze blows a euphoric gesture,
I'm indebted
to the surreal.
The grandiose pilgrimage
has settled all regrets and
lays floating where the crescent moon
has smiled.

© Copyright 2007 Raven Smith - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-03-02 07:00 PM


Raven~
Write the beauty of the moon and you hold me spellbound~

WELCOME to PiP~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 2007-03-02 07:33 PM


"The night air is crisp
and as the breeze blows a euphoric gesture,
I'm indebted"

The flow of this piece gave me a feeling of well-being, and the ending made me smile, too.

Enjoyed.

Welcome to Passions, I am sure you will see lots of great reads here you will enjoy.



always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

[This message has been edited by Janette (03-02-2007 08:28 PM).]

The Lady
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3 posted 2007-03-02 10:30 PM




"There, I’ve wailed
a sorrows tale
looking for natures handouts to
resign the waltz
that I had betrothed"

exceptional lines

welcome Raven

more please
is my suggestion

steavenr
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4 posted 2007-03-03 01:50 AM


am always drawn to a nice turn of a phrase and this one is exquisite

"The grandiose pilgrimage
has settled all regrets and
lays floating where the crescent moon
has smiled."

welcome to PiP and definitely looking for more...

passing shadows
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5 posted 2007-03-03 03:47 AM


lovely write

welcome to PIP

RavenSmith
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6 posted 2007-03-03 04:31 PM


Thank you to all of you for your encouragement. I love nature. Its one of the gifts that give me inner rest.

~Best Regards,Raven Smith

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