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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

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Michigan, USA

0 posted 2007-03-01 09:34 PM

Fall Snow, Spring Rain

This Labyrinth called destiny
Each step ordained preemptively
Along the tracks two ways recruit
Of dawn and dusk array astute
Gloss of seduction o’er seasonal mist

The froth of evening gowns distressed
A clear veneer convenes undressed
Refinished gates berate egress
And silent, silent beats the heart

Fall snow, spring rain
Become the amnesty of pain
In curious soliloquy
Solicitude calls quietly

Gloss of seduction o’er seasonal mist
And silent, silent beats the heart

Copyright Kkh 3/1/07

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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1 posted 2007-03-01 10:30 PM

this is simply gorgeous

Janette

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since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

2 posted 2007-03-02 08:56 AM

"Fall snow, spring rain
Become the amnesty of pain
In curious soliloquy
Solicitude calls quietly"

I adored your unique word usage here.
This stanza described to me what so many of us across the country are now experiencing. A pardon from additional snow which changed into rain turning the ground from white to reflecting water puddles. Yet then comes the concern of ice damns forming which cause flooding. I am not sure if this is what you intended for the reader to glean but this is what it meant to me. But then it is a good thing for a piece to be multifaceted.

Excellent write ...

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

unholyjudgement
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since 2007-02-27

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Wherever my soul takes me next

3 posted 2007-03-02 09:07 AM

Absolutly luv the word usage

<3

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

4 posted 2007-03-02 09:21 AM

"Fall snow, spring rain
Become the amnesty of pain
In curious soliloquy
Solicitude calls quietly"

Exquisite Kathleen!

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

5 posted 2007-03-02 10:36 PM

me too TD

"Fall snow, spring rain
Become the amnesty of pain
In curious soliloquy
Solicitude calls quietly"

calls quietly to me...

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2007-03-03 01:38 AM

as others are, I am impressed by your use of words and how you architect them to dance so agilely (is that a word?) over the tongue

"curious soliloquy" -- love that coupling, excellent write...

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

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OH

7 posted 2007-03-04 04:35 PM

T.D.,

Enjoyed your eloquent and resonnant poetry.
As always, it sings to me.

misc

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
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8 posted 2007-03-04 04:37 PM

should have packed this thread with me before I left... Now, I have it tucked safely away.
Thanks.

misc

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2007-03-04 05:21 PM

Along the tracks two ways recruit
Of dawn and dusk array astute

~*~

Now, IWIHWT...and delightfully
reminiscent in the kindest, most
gentlest way of Sandburg...

wonderful!

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

10 posted 2007-03-04 05:39 PM

"Fall snow, spring rain
Become the amnesty of pain
In curious soliloquy
Solicitude calls quietly"

Ditto all the above comments! Yes, Kathleen, I believe especially the spring rain becomes the "amnesty of pain" (love that phrase!!). Love the poem! *hugs*...jo

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