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Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA

0 posted 2007-02-20 11:21 AM



~~~I wrote this in sincere apologies
for my imperfections~~~


can you make perfection?
like a bottled brew?
can you make perfection?
in a flask or maybe two?
can you make perfection?
over the flames of a campfire?
can you make perfection baby?
and soar me even higher?
can make perfection?
out of something
that's already torn?
can you make perfection?
out of a ladys' scorn?
If you can make perfection
won't you send me a can or two
send it C O D and
address it to you know who....


~~~kingsangel~~~


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ivordavies
Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739
Chester, England
1 posted 2007-02-20 11:59 PM


~~~I wrote this with sincere respect
for the perfection of your poetry~~~

can you see perfection?
in a bottled brew?
can you see perfection?
in a flask that's made for two?
can you see perfection?
in the flames of a campfire?
can you see the perfection?
that soars you even higher?
can you see perfection?
in the words that you have born?
can you see perfection?
in this lady who you scorn?
If we can see perfection
can't you also see it too?
for there only is perfection
in the words that come from you...


Have Fun,

Ivor

[This message has been edited by ivordavies (02-21-2007 12:00 AM).]

aziza
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since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
2 posted 2007-02-21 12:05 PM


I absolutely love this poem.  I read it several times today and each time - I felt it and I smiled.  I wish I had written it.  (smiles)

A

Angel4aKing
Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
3 posted 2007-02-21 11:32 AM


AWWW thank you both so much I wasn't sure about it honestly...I just write whatever comes to mind....Thanx again you both are very sweet!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

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