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Debo
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0 posted 2007-02-18 06:10 AM


I'm lost in this cloud of smoke
Walking blind never looking behind
Waiting for my star to shine.

As each year slips into the past
It's gone forever can't get it back.

Trying to live my life walking
On the right path.

It ain't easy with the devil wispering
Take another toke as the room turns
Into a cloud of smoke.

Debo

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2007-02-18 08:47 AM


I can relate...it's not easy
icequeen
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2 posted 2007-02-18 10:46 PM


Not easy at all, I have fought him myself. You are always stronger than any devil. Blow smoke in his eyes and leave him blind. Then run...to wherever you want to go. Nicely written piece, concise with a full meaning. I like the style

Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

yvetters_24
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3 posted 2007-02-19 12:11 PM


i like this though i've never had a problem with smoking i have went thru many other things and its really hard to get the devils whispers out of ur head but you just have to be strong make a goal for yourself and once you reach that goal it wont be so hard to face what ur going thru u know what i mean


steavenr
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4 posted 2007-02-20 04:25 PM


this is a good write with a tour de force that allows it to be seen on different levels...enjoyed the write
Angel4aKing
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5 posted 2007-02-20 06:12 PM


and like preemptive mourning with out which nothing left of you but smoke....something I read in the New Yorker magazine....Just breathe........  

~~~kingsangel~~~

Angel4aKing
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6 posted 2007-02-20 06:14 PM


by the way i am also a smoker....smoke smoke smokin away!!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

Debo
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7 posted 2007-02-22 05:01 PM


Thanks to each of ya'll for your support and the kind replys to my post.
Yes that Devil has a way of saying thing you want to hear.

Debo

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