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Sunshine
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0 posted 2007-02-16 07:32 AM





The Best of You
[To three poets who take me back…]

~*~

They swing me willingly along palm swayed
zephyrs, tickling fancy they do,
of bared shoulders reddening to cap off
sandcapped knees…

willing me to consume again

coastlines, salt breezes,
foaming ankles with memories,
floating shells for me to hang a
star on…

she is the white wine laughter as deep
as mine, but smelling of jasmine,
he is the stranger turned dark by the sun,
telling me…

of things ascertained by rote…

bringing back the ping of self pain for not having
been born to celebrate the sun as I was
meant to, but solsticing heavenward
in winter’s climes

good enough, I tell myself,
to simply close mature eyes, remember
17 again, that one night on sandy shores
in good dress and bared feet

changing my life with a yes,

finding no regret to have found surf sounds
on prairie plains, to hear roaring waves
in tumultuous skies, and cheat grass
foaming my ankles with memories

for what was ever before the memories
had begun…

but I bless my memory bringers, all the same…
for the sunlined smiles they leave behind
the trees that still need to be climbed,
a hand to cheek knowing all

will ever be well…
unconditionally in heart, as much as in mind…




©Karilea Rilling Jungel
5 April 2002


© Copyright 2007 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2007-02-16 07:49 AM


If I didn't have more control, I'd be crying outloud by now...although, my eyes are filling up...this beautiful and most heartfelt poem, is one of the best I've read...because to me and for me, understanding this so well, and how so many words really do drive us home, yanno?  

Outstanding magnificant work dear lady

this....
bringing back the ping of self pain for not having
been born to celebrate the sun as I was
meant to, but solsticing heavenward
in winter’s climes

this made me want to run up and hug you in a sobbing and somewhat embarrassing tears of joy...

this...
good enough, I tell myself,
to simply close mature eyes, remember
17 again, that one night on sandy shores
in good dress and bared feet

changing my life with a yes,

finding no regret to have found surf sounds
on prairie plains, to hear roaring waves
in tumultuous skies, and cheat grass
foaming my ankles with memories

oh my, this took me aback, as my grand-daughter would say...simply stunning happy memories...

and this....
but I bless my memory bringers, all the same…
for the sunlined smiles they leave behind
the trees that still need to be climbed,
a hand to cheek knowing all

will ever be well…
unconditionally in heart, as much as in mind…

this from YOUR unconditional loving heart which speaks volumns about the love you've gained from reading...and you always remember to say, thank you in your comments..

my oh my, I've highlighted the entire poem haven't I?

Oh well, I love it and you for bringing this home...thank you for such a loving caring heart and for this dedication to 3 tremendous poets.  

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2 posted 2007-02-16 10:25 AM


this is softly sad to me...
JL
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3 posted 2007-02-16 11:19 AM


A beauty, for sure.

JL

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blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
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Rod
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4 posted 2007-02-16 01:53 PM


Very beautiful...all encompassing...and straight from your heart.
A joy to read.
Thank you so much!

It is better to light a single candle than to curse the darkness.

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displaced
5 posted 2007-02-16 03:02 PM


dang....Lee got it all
ivordavies
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6 posted 2007-02-16 04:56 PM


This poetry forces one into one's own memories and therefore, to me, is as fulfilling as poetry should be.

As I tend to be word blind to free writing, it is exceptional for me to be carried on this form of poetry as this poem as succeeded in doing.

It will probably force me to post something nostalgic... sorry,

Ivor

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7 posted 2007-02-16 08:35 PM



laughing

Lee did get it all
and still I need to quote this again
because it catches me up
and tells me truth


"good enough, I tell myself,
to simply close mature eyes, remember
17 again, that one night on sandy shores
in good dress and bared feet

changing my life with a yes,"

ahhh Karilea
that's soooo good

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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8 posted 2007-02-16 08:54 PM


Karilea... I wish you many many more memory bringers in your life.... wonderful writing my friend...     RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Martie
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9 posted 2007-02-16 10:44 PM


Sissie...The wheat field waves of the planes, with eyes shut tight and the wind blowing...surely they must be the ocean, as the ocean is them.  
Honeybunch
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10 posted 2007-02-17 04:57 AM


Wonderful ... and everything that has been said above.  
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11 posted 2007-02-17 08:08 AM


This is freestyle as it's best. Lovely!
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12 posted 2007-02-17 12:52 PM



"changing my life with a yes,"

"YES", Three little letters, but you bring so much to the word. You are indeed blessed to have learned this rule.  best to you, martyjo

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13 posted 2007-02-17 08:27 PM


the trees that still need to be climbed,

My favorite line...along with all the others!

You DO excel, don't you?

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Deep in the heart
14 posted 2007-02-19 09:33 AM



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15 posted 2007-02-19 09:59 AM


Beautiful!

Hugs, Robert

icequeen
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16 posted 2007-02-19 10:58 AM


Ohhhh my Sunshine-y friend I think this is going to be my favorite of all your work (though I can't promise that as I do love all of it, and you just keep bringing us more masterpieces!)
It should be made into a print on beautiful paper, and hanging on walls everywhere.

I can't pull a quote out because - LeeJ did it lol - and it is ALL so wonderful.

{{{Hugs}}}
Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

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17 posted 2007-02-19 11:12 AM


Oh Karilea, this is such a beautiful, heartfelt pome.
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18 posted 2007-02-19 11:26 AM


So glad that I was here today so I could read this beautiful heartfelt gem.

thank you for sharing Karilea.

((((hugs)))))
Charisma

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