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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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0 posted 2007-02-15 12:55 PM


old bachelors tell stories
of greek deities
erstwhile romantic notions
lost idyllic sentiments of need
nymph of mountains
infinite eros
claims the shell
painting dolphins in the mist
quintessential
feminine forms
trade and cultures
human irrational longing
craves a body void of characteristics
reasserting itself
fostering nature
an artistic moment
of folk songs
with sounds of future

paying attention to Shakespeare
confining allusions
say superstition
of tender sentiments
sprayed with enlightenment
wallowing sensitivity
defining essence
in some land of spiritual romance
like tropical islands
fostering sensual walks
in generations drawn to it
like musical tones of love

and so the stories go
old bachelors taste
wild and romantic
for another waltz with time
a powerfully drawn impulse
for the hopeless romantic
changing the definition
of how man co-exists
or what it simply means
to be human
in a land of
disillusionment &
discontent

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JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
1 posted 2007-02-15 01:07 PM


Land of discontent
Excellent write Lee J. but maybe more disillusionment than discontent.


JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

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2 posted 2007-02-15 01:57 PM


Lee~

'another waltz with time' ... and you word-dance it so well~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
3 posted 2007-02-15 02:02 PM


I especially enjoyed the following lines:

"infinite eros
claims the shell
painting dolphins in the mist
quintessential
feminine forms"

So lovely!

~ May your life be one of beauty and contentment ~ with some added dashes of magic tossed in for good measure!

Sending a big, warm hug your way,

Linda

The Lady
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The Southwest
4 posted 2007-02-15 07:23 PM




"and so the stories go"

well written LeeJ


steavenr
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5 posted 2007-02-15 09:32 PM


feelings well captured...but I think you could broaden your scope from 'old bachelors' to 'all men...'
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