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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296


0 posted 2007-02-15 09:56 AM


recipient
gorgeous
breeze of love
different circumstances
accomplished
beauty
elegance
simple manners
submitting
largeness of soul
shall return
in thought
in time
assent into
child of nature
stories unfold
sketching mortal life
enthusiasm
speculation
aroused by some
profound and vivid imagination

in you

intervene the in-between
sustaining life
designed by God
emancipated in your arms
clearing the mind
to sweet
confession
partakes the
woman in her
until shes nearly blind
"she was" you know...
blind

oh how her heart bled
in safe asylum, fear
perpetrated determination
the hopeless trials of life
pulled you from her arms
motives, intellect,
material wealth
you name it
sultry woman, much younger
then yourself
perfect stupidity
validity of these claims

suppressed
narritives of weaknesses
covered his soul
he cheated and she knew
she knew
she knew

deep chagrin
boasting better
that cherished truth
oh inconsistency
the jewel of
spilt human blood
wrath of shock
murderous should have beens
sighs and times indignant
becomes
a church of mockery
dictates privileged sympathy
of destiny
of lonliness where
personal observation becomes
flesh of flesh
woman
mother
homely proverb
ignorance a fraudulent sale
the
degradation
darkly fits
you know the place
that kisses lips no longer

it being a dreamy myth
sacrificing texture
but oh
to the groan of misplaced
becomes the wife of reproof
profiting by
those earnest tears
the pain and
imprisonment of distance
lulls the child to sleep
hush now, shhhhh

for
necessity of other days
the sojourner
builds a skyscraper with a
swinging hammock
lingering perceptive kindness
deep in thought
engrossed and making love
with memories
assuring her
spellbound entrance
where he never leaves
and
she gains the summit
by light of the moon
with you
in all her thoughts
telling her of your arrival
in a place
where time
was lost


© Copyright 2007 Lee J. - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2007-02-15 10:06 AM


LeeJ
Excellent, I can never read your poetry in one breath.

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2007-02-15 10:13 AM


Lee~
You take a thought and squeeze more out of it than most of us can do~
This one is full word-juice~

Enjoyed~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
3 posted 2007-02-15 11:09 AM


Hi, Lovely Lee! A stirring story to be sure! One that expressed the trials and tribulations of a woman's journey ~ jubilation, determination, speculation, resignation, imagination, indignation ~ and emancipation!

Oh, and by the way, I totally concur with the the responses of both Seymour and Marge!

Luvsya!
Linda


Paul Wilson
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4 posted 2007-02-15 12:32 PM


Lee...All I can say is WOW much think about.

My favorite part...Paul

oh how her heart bled
in safe asylum, fear
perpetrated determination
the hopeless trials of life
pulled you from her arms
motives, intellect,
material wealth
you name it
sultry woman, younger
then yourself
perfect stupidity
validity of these claims
were
suppressed
narritives of weaknesses
covered his soul
he cheated and she knew
she knew
she knew

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
5 posted 2007-02-15 12:52 PM


"sultry woman, younger
then yourself
perfect stupidity
validity of these claims
were
suppressed
narritives of weaknesses
covered his soul
he cheated and she knew
she knew
she knew"

Great write Lee J.
I enjoy the way you take a reader in totally unsuspecting, then wham!
So reality riveting to anyone who takes the time to read you.
Enjoyed.

JL


Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
6 posted 2007-02-15 07:05 PM



I agree with all of the above
and oh how I love this...

"she was" you know...
blind

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
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Sydney, Australia
7 posted 2007-02-16 10:28 PM


LeeJ... I love the words you speak - beautiful always!  thank you .. RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
8 posted 2007-02-17 04:52 AM


LeeJ - You go so very deep in your writings and when I prepare to follow I know that the journey is going to be worthwhile.   I'm never disappointed.  Thank you!!
trutodaraiders
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9 posted 2007-02-17 08:57 AM


You are 1 of the best free style writers I know. Enjoyed the read immensly
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
10 posted 2007-02-17 12:32 PM


"she was" you know...
blind

oh how her heart bled
in safe asylum

~*~

Facets, prisms, and
cold, hard, ice...

still, why does
it look so warm, life?


latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
11 posted 2007-02-17 12:42 PM


This my love I understand, but only through empathy. Not experience. But please accept  this as my reason to read all you write. I learn all the time and understand more and more. best martyjo
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