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passing shadows
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0 posted 2007-02-12 12:19 PM



Vision


You say when you close your eyes, you see me.
You say when you touch her, you close your eyes.

The light came in early then
and I could still hear you
over the angry morning
alone, exposed, but near you-

a vision of our shadows
long after you'd gone home
to lay and close your eyes
hidden away but not alone-

and when I closed my eyes
they filled with seas of sorrow
hurrying the darkness
that would justify tomorrow-

The darkness comes in early now
silence across the sun,
in emptiness of you, I think
what is it I should have done
to save the vision from its demise,
to prevent the oceans' turn to mist?
I go home and close my eyes
and I wonder if you exist.



© Copyright 2007 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
trutodaraiders
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1 posted 2007-02-12 01:34 AM


I loved the poem,. Why

and when I closed my eyes
they filled with seas of sorrow
hurrying the darkness
that would justify tomorrow-

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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2 posted 2007-02-12 03:25 AM


oh my!! this is a beautiful piece of writing Dixie... girlfriend, just awesome!  RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

HopeS
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3 posted 2007-02-12 08:31 AM


Beautiful , heartfelt and touching

Hope

Angel4aKing
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4 posted 2007-02-12 01:25 PM


I wonder as well.....

~~~kingsangel~~~

The Lady
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5 posted 2007-02-12 06:21 PM




"and when I closed my eyes
they filled with seas of sorrow"

amazing work Dixie

and the first two lines
are awesome...


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