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DennisTheMenace
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0 posted 2007-02-11 04:08 PM


I watch silently
And you don’t know I’m here
You move gracefully
Taking time and using care
Drying off slow
Towel glides over your softness
Places I now know
Taught to me in darkness

I scare you with a sound
Unable to know the beauty I’ve found



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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2007-02-11 04:22 PM


brings soft thoughts to mind~~

nicely done
M

DennisTheMenace
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2 posted 2007-02-11 04:25 PM


thanx
glad to get any comments here
specially nice one

ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2007-02-11 04:30 PM


Enjoyed the word play,
"taught to me in darkness"

Exceptional warmth
TD

DennisTheMenace
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4 posted 2007-02-11 04:33 PM


thanx
not exactly wordplay, my girlfriend is blind
(but don't tell her, I'm not sure she knows)

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2007-02-11 08:52 PM


precious

personally I dry off fast...too cold for hanging out

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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6 posted 2007-02-11 11:05 PM


oh I do like this!   well done!  RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Edward Grim
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7 posted 2007-02-11 11:17 PM


A little too voyeuristic for my taste but your writing abilities are certainly there so there you have it.    - Ed

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Angel4aKing
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8 posted 2007-02-12 01:41 PM


hey that's vouyerism isn't it!!!! LOL perfectly expressed!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

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with you
9 posted 2007-02-12 01:49 PM


I think it's incredibly sweet....
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