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my first "poem" here.. |
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xrayzerase Junior Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 10usa |
first -just want to say hi. my name is andrea. this is my first poem here. it is called "and now??" . i clench fingers bones with skin many bones what would i do without you?? eyes little peering cameras never turning off on on on on on on on on please stop just sometimes no? oh--its the dumb nerves and other "mixed media" (?) making up that thing called the brain it's you brain is it not? that causes all this mess not my hands eyes oh---man. why is this not a clear night of sparkles of a million stars of vast infinity of dreamlands i used to look out the window daytime dayroom psych hospital out outside always outside the long sidewalk i knew so well pulling me much further than i EVER suspected it would then and now and the rest of my life this pull that became my lifeline that day those days at that window at that window i wed my mind welded my hands weeded my eyes and found clarity and such a mess it is one would suspect clarity to be clear yes perhaps if deciphered that way. oh man why? where is peace? and i yet am thrilled to feel the fire burn inside me once again always again again always searing as if layered deeply under and above my softest love for all things oh god where am i anymore? i feel perched on the tip of some fragile winter branch which with freezing days nights it could snap at any time and would i fly then? will i know how? to go out up high into the blackness the cold fresh air of deep silent night way out in space fly there? stars and such vast holes of mystery but it is .. i yes.. i want to fly yes i really do and i want to know fire as a source of brewing brewing what? "time" brewing "time" into a thing of many experiences searches into something something something i see touch hold as real i haunt myself as if i were in flight long ago and i just feel this ghost-like dream of hollow sound footing the floor without sound and yet it is now that the floor is beneath my feet i speak in jumbled thought and i see and dont and do and feel and hold my head low as if as if? no no one is hurting you i know i just am sad i cry why? because i i.. i am afraid of what? .. .. 'to-- to fly yeah just that. TO FLY. away. .... |
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JeffD Junior Member
since 2007-02-06
Posts 28CT |
That was great is was very story like and everything linked together well. Keep up the good writing. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions. Please, check your email for a very Special Greeting! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hello Andrea and Welcome to Passions! I know you are going to enjoy it here. You also know how much I love this entrance piece!  I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~  In the midst of winter, |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Wow!!! what a fantastic first offering to our blue pages .... Andrea this was great!! Welcome to our family, I think you will love it here as we do....  RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Welcome to Passions in Poetry Andrea. I do hope to read more of your poems. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
welcome andrea to our family of friends this surely is a haven without ends.... ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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PEBBLES Member
since 2006-10-30
Posts 69South Australia, Australia |
Welcome Andrea, I am a fledgling myself and I am so looking forward to your next post. I too want to fly, did fly once, will again, one day. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
welcome Andrea! make yourself at home enjoyed this first post of yours, will be looking for more |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hello Andrea and Welcome to PIP Enjoyed this read, liked the way your mind evaluated emotion...life times You'll fit right in here... keep writing |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Welcome!! To fly....I know just what you mean |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Andrea~ What a WONDERFUL poetic step into this circle of new friends~  'at that window i wed my mind welded my hands weeded my eyes and found clarity' Your expressions here are priceless~  Enjoy yourself ... for we will enjoy coming to know you through your poetry~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Winter Butterfly Member
since 2007-02-03
Posts 61The hidden path beyond the ivy gate. |
Welcome Andrea a wonderful poem. I was entranced from start to finish. ~Winter~ "The only way to learn to fly is to spread your wings and jump." |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Andrea! Welcome. You are much braver than I was on entry. Took me a while to get up the courage to post. So, you see, I am quite impressed and also happy to see your here. Hope you enjoy our blues as much as I have. Peace.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Notelady Junior Member
since 2007-02-09
Posts 11the deep deep south |
Beautiful! keep them coming! |
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LukeatNFFC Junior Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 42Nottingham, England |
A bit long for me, but a nice shape about it overall. |
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xrayzerase Junior Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 10usa |
thanking everyone for such a warm welcome. want to do a bit of reading get to know others work.thanks again andrea |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Genius... You might very well be a prodigy. I don't say this too often, actually I never say this. Your voice is superb. Your structure could use a little practice but that's trivial at this point; your words came together perfectly. You are unique Andrea, don't alter your style. Brava - Edward Head Cheese & Chicken Feet |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Also I just finished looking at your work on deviantart. I am not surprised at all. Your talent is boundless. Right on... Head Cheese & Chicken Feet |
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DreamerSpirit Member
since 2006-10-02
Posts 240Buenos Aires, Argentina |
Welcome to passions andrea, i loved your first poem here...it's full of feeling. Good Work, And Welcome!. |
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