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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2007-02-05 07:22 PM



More Or Less


I hate this feeling
of coming home
to this deafening echo
of loneliness
and this spinning
out of control that
where the only voices
heard is the radio
I just don’t know
where it is I stand
and vision is as clear
as oil on the lens
can life be lived as
Joni Mitchell’s cactus tree
so full yet
so empty
where there is
more of less
to less of more

“all romantics meet the same fate”…Joni Mitchell



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1 posted 2007-02-05 09:09 PM


They will lose her if they follow
And she only means to please them
And her heart is full and hollow
Like a cactus tree
While she's so busy being free

Nothing can fill a space up more than  something, especially loneliness.

I used to hear her sing that song, and knew her reason for writing it.  I also knew the message would last longer than time itself.

Poignant and so heartfelt Helen.

passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2007-02-05 09:24 PM



The Lady
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The Southwest
3 posted 2007-02-06 09:50 PM



"and vision is as clear
as oil on the lens"

a song of pain Helen
so well done...

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2007-02-06 09:53 PM


And Mys is so right...
how lonliness can bloom
right into the dead of night.

Your poignancy in print
is priceless.


Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
5 posted 2007-02-07 03:47 PM


I just don’t know
where it is I stand
and vision is as clear
as oil on the lens

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

And if only I knew where I stood
then vision would be as clear
as oil on the glass


I can relate...

~~~kingsangel~~~

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