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CastleGuard
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Alberta, Canada

0 posted 2007-02-02 10:11 AM




an abandoned house -
spiderwebs cling to rafters
as threads of sorrow


CG

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passing shadows
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displaced
1 posted 2007-02-02 10:25 AM


I closed my eyes and saw this

powerful imagery here

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
2 posted 2007-02-02 07:50 PM



oh yes CG!


viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
3 posted 2007-02-02 07:59 PM


Great image. maybe change "as" to "the"

I really like this haiku! I hate haikus... restriction of line length drives me up the wall, hah!

Nice work.  

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2007-02-02 08:27 PM


Enjoyed...James
SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown
5 posted 2007-02-02 08:43 PM


Very descriptive.
Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
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6 posted 2007-02-02 09:53 PM


The castle guard is NOT suppossed to abandon his castle....but after reading you get a pardon!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

TSC
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Canada
7 posted 2007-02-03 02:12 AM


I don't typically like haiku's, but I really like this one. To make something emotionally signifigant in such a short space - skillfull.
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