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Martie
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0 posted 2007-02-01 01:47 PM





It Came on Wing

It came on wing of air soft-tuned
waif of thought loomed
by mother’s willing knot
and minutes daring sky dark tossed

Saying   now is in between of see
a place of dream and slanted time
and if you open mind of eye
past goodbye to winged caprice
where peace holds eager at arms length
you’ll see around the curve of grace
the lovely of a missing face

I know this thought is fulsome want
and bids to see past seem of real
to peel the skin between the strands
such faith is hard sometimes to feel

I’ve seen this bless of rip in fabric
all stitched down with stretch elastic
to leave the room of bright lit tone
to find a song   no not alone
but filled with fabric cinched not severed
between the clouds    I’ve seen forever
----
RR and RP with love always for Michelle and thoughts of Sissie Sunshine.

© Copyright 2007 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-02-01 01:57 PM


for some reason, I knew

before I opened this



beautiful you

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2 posted 2007-02-01 02:09 PM


to find a song   no not alone
but filled with fabric cinched not severed
between the clouds    I’ve seen forever

~*~

And this is why I do.




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3 posted 2007-02-01 02:31 PM


Beautiful pic and write, too

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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4 posted 2007-02-01 02:36 PM


it came on wing of your beautiful, poetic sensibilities

H, Robert

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5 posted 2007-02-01 02:37 PM


Martie
A lovely write, I enjoyed the read.

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6 posted 2007-02-01 05:34 PM


Isn't that strange, I thought the title was It Came On Wind?  I thought before I read it too that it was about or for Michelle, and that you had been up to "your" mountain and felt her.  Beautiful write Martie, beautiful.
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7 posted 2007-02-01 05:53 PM


I found this interesting and in a style I had not encountered until joining this site.

Although I did not know the subject of your poetry, I feel that it floats in a place I know well.

Especially relevant due to recent circumstances, thank you for an enlightened write....

Ivor

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8 posted 2007-02-01 06:25 PM


MartieSis~
Your wing-fluttered thoughts of Michelle come so gently ... so beautifully, so poignant~

It is a grand time of remembering that little angel~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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9 posted 2007-02-01 06:29 PM


"I’ve seen this bless of rip in fabric
all stitched down with stretch elastic
to leave the room of bright lit tone
to find a song   no not alone
but filled with fabric cinched not severed
between the clouds    I’ve seen forever"

Martie, I know this to be true and it is a blessing.  Absolutely lovely way of putting it!  *hugs*....jo

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10 posted 2007-02-01 07:05 PM


as you always do Martie - wonderful sharing of love - Paul
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11 posted 2007-02-02 12:49 PM




"It came on wing of air soft-tuned
waif of thought loomed
by mother’s willing knot"

speaks loudly of love
  for your Michelle
  and hers for you


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12 posted 2007-02-02 09:13 AM


"to leave the room of bright lit tone
to find a song   no not alone
but filled with fabric cinched not severed
between the clouds    I’ve seen forever"

Hugging the beauty of this time remembered.

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

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13 posted 2007-02-02 09:44 AM


I've never gotten over it....from the first time I ever saw any of your writing of Michelle, it's been difficult for me to read. By the time I'm one verse in, I'm fighting tears, and sometimes I barely make it through the poem. Something about the mix of heartbreak and timeless love just gets to me.

It's a testament to your poetic skill as much as anything, I suppose, but even that's never stronger than when you're writing of her.

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14 posted 2007-02-02 01:48 PM




Siyo Martie my heart joins yours in tears for those lost,but never ever forgotten. The pain my sister never lessens,nor does the love we feel within for that part of our heart has gone on that Long Walk to the Happy Place of loving safety.
my prayers are there with you!


  granny!

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15 posted 2007-02-02 06:35 PM


Martie, dear sweet lady, my prayers and blessings are with  you....your words fill  us somehow, as I'm certain they fill you to...the mind and soul is a spectacular thing, and it is especially nice to read you and know you
Luv
Lee J>

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16 posted 2007-02-02 07:34 PM


between the clouds    I’ve seen forever

This I like!!! And have I ever!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

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