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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2007-01-31 08:06 AM


Sad Haiku

The forest of trees
Speaks of dirge on odors breeze
And I bow the wake


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1 posted 2007-01-31 08:21 AM


Good morning, Mr. T.

I lament your sad arboreal requiem ~ but not your fine 'haikuic' writing of it!

Giving you an angel mornin'

EA


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2 posted 2007-01-31 08:39 AM


Good Morning Sy~
And a fine haiku it is!
& , Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

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3 posted 2007-01-31 09:06 AM



Seymour~

Lamenting pen's ink
Pours out this morning's mourning
Let's join hands in love~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~


~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2007-01-31 09:16 AM


Earth Angel
Could I ask for anything more.

Nancy,
It is just the wake I woke.

Marge,
Those dear hands I love
Besides the garden wall, I
Love them most of all.

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5 posted 2007-01-31 10:21 AM


trees of the forest
bow to the breezes blowing
dirge of odor brought

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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6 posted 2007-01-31 11:02 AM



Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2007-01-31 11:02 AM


Interloper
Just as good, thank you.

[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (01-31-2007 12:27 PM).]

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2007-01-31 11:03 AM


passing,
Thank you sweety.

LeeJ
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9 posted 2007-01-31 11:51 AM


I can't tell you how sad this made me....cheer up, else I'll cry all day...

Well done Sy....

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10 posted 2007-01-31 12:11 PM


Lovely.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2007-01-31 12:29 PM


LeeJ
Don't be sad,

Pilgrimage
Thank you, thank you.

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12 posted 2007-01-31 01:54 PM


Sy...The tree is such a symbol of strength to me, as are you.  
Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2007-01-31 02:50 PM


Martie
The sweet of life has its decay.
The next one will be of joy Ola.

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14 posted 2007-01-31 07:45 PM


Mr. T, you never cease to put the wonder back into my heart
Sad is not always bad, else how could we know when we are happy?

A lovely haiku from you makes my day


Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2007-01-31 08:18 PM


icequeen
A lovely comment, thank you so much.

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16 posted 2007-01-31 10:10 PM


This reminds me of why I should never attempt haiku... you are just too good at them Seymour!

I am jealous... I think I shall have to go and sulk now!

Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 2007-01-31 10:18 PM


Triskaidekaphobia
LOL Sulking is not allowed.

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18 posted 2007-02-01 11:28 AM


This is indeed a sad one, Seymour. But, very well done.
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19 posted 2007-02-01 11:43 AM


HMMM.I like it. Thanks.
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20 posted 2007-02-01 11:44 AM


Sy,
Not as good, just a try at Haiku which I really try to avoid ...
every chance I get

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Seymour Tabin
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21 posted 2007-02-01 11:53 AM


Interloper
Attaining simplicity is hard.

PEBBLES
Thanks for the like.

SmartChick
Thank you dear.

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22 posted 2007-02-01 08:32 PM


Hi, Seymour.

I'm not sure that I completely understand...perhaps this has nautical terms in it?

Anyhow, I liked the mindful twists in your imagery.

Great work!

John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

Seymour Tabin
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23 posted 2007-02-01 09:03 PM


John,
The only double meaning in the haiku is the word wake. One meaning is to wake up and the other is to join in the wake of the dirge in the forest.

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24 posted 2007-02-02 12:39 PM



excellent Sir Sy!

iliana
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25 posted 2007-02-02 12:41 PM


Nothing's sadder than a sad tree.  Good haiku, Sy.  *hugs*....jo
Seymour Tabin
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26 posted 2007-02-02 08:57 AM


iliana
How right you are.

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