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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2007-01-30 10:49 AM


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before
again at dawn
the first light to I

before the body
recalls its weight
what it will
and will not use to see

itself distinct
there is only one

being
without dream
unbounded
by any thought
of time

or any thing
imaginable
except a sense
that in

this formless state
of nascent endlessness

there is . . . who is
and how it should be


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The Lady
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1 posted 2007-01-30 07:41 PM



"there is . . . who is
and how it should be"

excellent work John

Huan Yi
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2 posted 2007-01-30 10:53 PM


Lady,

Thank you

A difficult write
for how does one
describe what is ineffable
beyond its negatives?

Thanks again

John

passing shadows
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3 posted 2007-02-01 07:52 AM


perfect
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4 posted 2007-02-01 08:46 AM


and how it is.

::smiles::   nice   very nice

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5 posted 2007-02-02 01:03 AM


Speed bumps be damned, I still wish I'd written this....and I may try my hand at it, one of these days.

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Huan Yi
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6 posted 2007-02-02 08:27 AM


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Thanks Ed,

I think the difference is where you see a bump
I intended a hard stop.  It was a difficult piece
because it had to be written very low key
and without image or comparison.


Thanks again.

John


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